The chart below shows the percentage of the day working adults spent doing different activities in a particular country in 1958 and in 2008 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The chart below shows the percentage of the day working adults spent doing different activities in a particular country in 1958 and in 2008.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The given pie charts demonstrate the proportion of activities which working adults spent in day in a particular country in the period of 50 years from 1958 to 2005

Overall, working accounted for the highest percentage of all the activities in both 1958 and 2008. As can be seen, all of the categories with the exception of going out and sleeping experienced an upward trend in the given period.

It is obvious that working was the most outstanding figures in the pie chart in 1958 which was 15 times as much as that of commuting, at 2%. The second highest proportion of time in a day belonged to sleeping. Friends and family gatherings took up for nearly one fifth. The ratio of time for relaxation and other activities including hobbies, playing sports and so on was under one in ten, at 8% and 6% respectively.

In the year of 2008, the ratio of employed people spending time on working underwent an opposite trend compared with that of sleeping. Working time increased by 10%, however, sleeping counterpart dropped by 7 %. The portion of day that people used for travelling to work quadrupled that of 1958. Home creation rose to 13% which was higher 5% the former year. Furthermore, family and friends’ reunion decreased three times. Time which was allocated for leisure pursuit remained unchanged over 50 years.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 116, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... in both 1958 and 2008. As can be seen, all of the categories with the exception of going ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 138, Rule ID: WITH_THE_EXCEPTION_OF[1]
Message: Use simply 'except' or 'except for'
Suggestion: except; except for
.... As can be seen, all of the categories with the exception of going out and sleeping experienced an u...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, second, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 3.15609756098 285% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 33.7804878049 121% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1103.0 965.302439024 114% => OK
No of words: 226.0 196.424390244 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88053097345 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87727950738 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70802235665 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 106.607317073 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58407079646 0.547539520022 107% => OK
syllable_count: 312.3 283.868780488 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 56.8821271481 43.030603864 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.9166666667 112.824112599 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8333333333 22.9334400587 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.23603664747 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166287583621 0.215688989381 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0552087926276 0.103423049105 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0853139975439 0.0843802449381 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126470233797 0.15604864568 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0802960647376 0.0819641961636 98% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.2329268293 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 61.2550243902 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 11.4140731707 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 40.7170731707 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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