The chart shows the percentage of deaths from heart disease and cancer, and calories consumed from unrefined planted foods.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart shows the percentage of deaths from heart disease and cancer, and calories consumed from unrefined planted foods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by Maris on Wed, 07/31/2019 - 08:12

The bar chart compares and contrasts data on the differences in the amount of people who died because of heart problem, cancer and calories from processed foods.

A closer look at the diagram highlights the fact that while European countries and America have a firmly higher proportion in causing death from heart disease and cancer, a dissent is denoted in Asian nations.

Among the chart, Hungary hits the peak of exactly 90% in the social nightmare of heart disease and cancer, whereas; the percentage of communities who died for unrefined plant foods is reaching the bottom (10%). The death of processed foods take one-nine of the health and cancer problem. In comparison, a diverse fact is indicated from Lao columns. Slightly over 90% and a little less than 10% are the percentage of death members of society as heart problem, cancer and unrefined foods, respectively. Nevertheless, the Greece proportion of 2 figures are nearly the same, at approximately 45%.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, nevertheless, so, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 33.7804878049 68% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 816.0 965.302439024 85% => OK
No of words: 159.0 196.424390244 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1320754717 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55098862472 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73170364752 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 96.0 106.607317073 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.603773584906 0.547539520022 110% => OK
syllable_count: 242.1 283.868780488 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.0234466635 43.030603864 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.571428571 112.824112599 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7142857143 22.9334400587 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.23603664747 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 3.70975609756 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.13902439024 439% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301710001157 0.215688989381 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124143898296 0.103423049105 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.062512937168 0.0843802449381 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193620280725 0.15604864568 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0430186848833 0.0819641961636 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.2329268293 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 61.2550243902 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 11.4140731707 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.06136585366 115% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 40.7170731707 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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