The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The first bar chart compass the data of marriage and divorces in America from 1970 to 2000, while the marital status of the USA adults in the two particular years is illustrated in the second bar graph. Overall, throughout the surveyed period, the married population remained nearly twice the number of divorces, and far more Americans were married than any other types of people.
First of all, 2.5 million residents in the USA were married in 1970. This portion kept stable until 1980 before experiencing a gradual decrease and bottomed out at 2 million in 2000. On the contrary, people who were divorced firstly rose from 1 million to its peak at 1.4 million in the first decade. Therefore, this figure moderately dropped back to its initial statistic at 1 million in 2000.
As for the marital status in America, the proportion of married adults were highest in both years, which represented 70% and 59% respectively. The second place was taken by those who were never married, as it accounted for 15% in 1970 and slightly grew to 20% in 2000. Although divorced population quadrupled its original figure, those who were widowed or divorced remained the most insignificant portions, with the rate under 10% in both groups and both years.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
1. Overall, throughout the surveyed period, the married population remained nearly twice the number of divorces
math like 'nearly twice' is not welcomed in IELTS, better:
There was a clear downward trend of people getting married in the US.
or we may say something exactly twice/double or %50 of something else.
2. why 'portion'?
First of all, 2.5 million residents in the USA were married in 1970. This portion kept stable...
it is 'number' in the first graph:
From 1970 to 1980, 2.5 million marriages were registered in America; however, this number kept stable...
3. better to change:
Therefore, this figure moderately dropped back to its initial statistic at 1 million in 2000. //it is not a conclusion
to:
However, this figure moderately dropped back to its initial statistic at 1 million in 2000.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 10
No. of Words: 210 200
No. of Characters: 1002 1000
No. of Different Words: 123 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.807 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.771 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.527 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 73 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 56 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 33 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 17 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.928 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.432 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.634 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.092 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, therefore, while, as for, first of all, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1034.0 965.302439024 107% => OK
No of words: 210.0 196.424390244 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92380952381 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80675409584 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57431936275 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 106.607317073 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609523809524 0.547539520022 111% => OK
syllable_count: 309.6 283.868780488 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.0635476453 43.030603864 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.888888889 112.824112599 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 22.9334400587 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.22222222222 5.23603664747 176% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167208497867 0.215688989381 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0696097709051 0.103423049105 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0632796333761 0.0843802449381 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115759823432 0.15604864568 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0504623503226 0.0819641961636 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.2329268293 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 61.2550243902 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 11.4140731707 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.06136585366 105% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 40.7170731707 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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