The charts below show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and town B in 1960 2010

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The charts below show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and town B in 1960, 2010.

Given are pie charts depicting the alteration in the percentages of workers in different industries, namely manufacturing, sales and services in two distinct towns over a phase of over 40 years, starting in 1960.
It is conspicuous that while both towns shared the same movement in the extension of employee numbers in services and the shrinking in the number of manufacturing workers, the opposite was true for sales.
Regarding the rates of workers in the sales industry, while there were nearly a half fewer people working in this sector in town A from 30% in the first year to around 16% in 2010, town B experienced a period of moderate growth in that number over the years with negligible 2% higher than 20% recorded in the 1960s. Furthermore, this field accounted for the lowest number of employees in both towns compared to the rest in 2010.
In terms of workers’ percentages working in the services industry, an expansion in work labor was recorded in town A when only 29% of people involving in the first year, this rate reached 64% in 2010 which turned from the least favorable job in 1960 to the most popular one 40 years later. Likewise, the same movement was recorded in town B when only 10% of the whole town’s workers in the first year increased to sharply a quarter within 40 years, becoming the second industry with a large number of workers. By contrast, moving backward in the percentage of people employed in manufacturing, the numbers dropped to only a fifth in town A and roughly 53% in town B in the last year given from 41% and 70% in 1960 respectively. Despite that fall, manufacturing still held its first rank in the rate of people working among other fields in town B in the early 21 century.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 132, Rule ID: FROM_FORM[3]
Message: Did you mean 'form'?
Suggestion: form
...people working in this sector in town A from 30% in the first year to around 16% in ...
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Line 4, column 49, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'services'' or 'service's'?
Suggestion: services'; service's
... of workers’ percentages working in the services industry, an expansion in work labor wa...
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Line 4, column 483, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ears, becoming the second industry with a large number of workers. By contrast, moving backward i...
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Line 4, column 862, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'century' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'centuries'.
Suggestion: centuries
... other fields in town B in the early 21 century.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, likewise, regarding, second, still, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 33.7804878049 198% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1424.0 965.302439024 148% => OK
No of words: 304.0 196.424390244 155% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68421052632 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 3.73543355544 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68020050052 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 106.607317073 146% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513157894737 0.547539520022 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 414.0 283.868780488 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 38.0 22.4926829268 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.1263613715 43.030603864 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 178.0 112.824112599 158% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.0 22.9334400587 166% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.125 5.23603664747 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360563130861 0.215688989381 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.164367401415 0.103423049105 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0563158664763 0.0843802449381 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199071022572 0.15604864568 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0856887537517 0.0819641961636 105% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.6 13.2329268293 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.83 61.2550243902 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.3012195122 153% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.46 11.4140731707 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 40.7170731707 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.4329268293 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.2 10.9970731707 156% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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