The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

Submitted by Scorer on Thu, 01/25/2018 - 07:42

The diagram defines the procedure used by bricks manufacturers for the building industry, the procedure consist on 6 steps clay digging to packaging.

Overall, it can be seen that the brick manufacturers use the clay for making bricks. Firstly, the procedure includes clay digging using a excavator and clay is sent to metal grid having roller beneath it where metal is separated from clay. So, now the clay is ready for making bricks and for that there are two process wire cutter and mould but before that clay is mixed with water and sand and then brick making process starts using the wire cutt...

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 137, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...e procedure includes clay digging using a excavator and clay is sent to metal gri...
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Line 3, column 325, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'cutters'?
Suggestion: cutters
...and for that there are two process wire cutter and mould but before that clay is mixed...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 325, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'cutter' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'cutters'.
Suggestion: cutters
...and for that there are two process wire cutter and mould but before that clay is mixed...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...g the wire cutter or mould. Secondly, the bricks then sent to the drying oven ...
^^
Line 5, column 214, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mparatively more time needed for cooling process because having different tempera...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 15.0 33.7804878049 44% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 876.0 965.302439024 91% => OK
No of words: 179.0 196.424390244 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8938547486 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65774358864 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49651297027 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 97.0 106.607317073 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541899441341 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 258.3 283.868780488 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.4926829268 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.1606739152 43.030603864 172% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.0 112.824112599 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.8333333333 22.9334400587 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 5.23603664747 191% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286108700876 0.215688989381 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.160928427216 0.103423049105 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0642113154775 0.0843802449381 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180504926111 0.15604864568 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0463561167448 0.0819641961636 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.2329268293 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 61.2550243902 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 10.3012195122 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 11.4140731707 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 40.7170731707 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.9970731707 124% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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