The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton.Summarise the information by selection and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton.
Summarise the information by selection and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The presented pie chart illustrates the proportion of transport and car use in the Edmonton. At the same time, the reasons of car using in this metropolis are showed in the table.
As can be clearly seen from the diagrams that car is the dominant choice among four kinds of vehicle namely car, light rail transit, bus and taxi. Additionally, the major purpose for driving the car is commute to work.
According to the pie chart, the percentage of car used to travel accounts for 45%. 35% is the proportion of light rail transit use in Edmonton. Moreover, bus and taxi have the same ratio of use, standing at 10%.
Turning to the table, the commute to work purpose constitutes 55%, which is highest percentage. There are 45% and 40% causing for business and talking students to school, respectively. The ratio of free time activities and shopping are just 15%.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 202, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'commuted'.
Suggestion: commuted
...he major purpose for driving the car is commute to work. According to the pie chart, t...
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Line 4, column 23, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...standing at 10%. Turning to the table, the commute to work purpose constitutes 55%, which ...
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Line 4, column 74, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'is the highest'.
Suggestion: is the highest
... to work purpose constitutes 55%, which is highest percentage. There are 45% and 40% causi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
moreover, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 33.7804878049 62% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 715.0 965.302439024 74% => OK
No of words: 150.0 196.424390244 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76666666667 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.49963551158 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58543785245 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 92.0 106.607317073 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.613333333333 0.547539520022 112% => OK
syllable_count: 215.1 283.868780488 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.7867610237 43.030603864 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 71.5 112.824112599 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0 22.9334400587 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.2 5.23603664747 23% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143865956072 0.215688989381 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0587174030113 0.103423049105 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.053087642519 0.0843802449381 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0916276234973 0.15604864568 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0606762344241 0.0819641961636 74% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 13.2329268293 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 61.2550243902 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.3012195122 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.79 11.4140731707 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.06136585366 107% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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