The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024

Essay topics:

The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

The two maps show the main changes which will have taken place in the school site between the year 2004 and 2024.
In general, the school is predicted to have more students in the future. It is clear that this place in 2024 will have more facilities than in 2004.
The number of students in this school increases significantly, by 400 students compared to this figure in 2014. In 2004, there was a path directly connected from the main entrance to the sports field. However, in 2024, this sports area will have been turned into another school building. One interesting change is that the path will have been blocked due to a hall which will be constructed, to connect the two old buildings.
This school site will have one more car park placed next to the new building on the north right corner. The will have been an extension of the road passing through the second school building and connecting directly to the parking lot. A completely new sports field will have been built next to the new road and car park, but smaller in size compared to the old one.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 321, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...built next to the new road and car park, but smaller in size compared to the old ...
^^
Line 4, column 327, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: smaller
...next to the new road and car park, but smaller in size compared to the old one.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, second, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 1.00243902439 798% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 872.0 965.302439024 90% => OK
No of words: 191.0 196.424390244 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56544502618 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71756304063 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.26704593525 2.65546596893 85% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 106.607317073 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523560209424 0.547539520022 96% => OK
syllable_count: 243.9 283.868780488 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.5086649982 43.030603864 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 87.2 112.824112599 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1 22.9334400587 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6 5.23603664747 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208449872596 0.215688989381 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102653534546 0.103423049105 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0935423235615 0.0843802449381 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172650673177 0.15604864568 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10495546415 0.0819641961636 128% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 13.2329268293 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 61.2550243902 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 11.4140731707 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.81 8.06136585366 84% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 40.7170731707 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 321, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...built next to the new road and car park, but smaller in size compared to the old ...
^^
Line 4, column 327, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: smaller
...next to the new road and car park, but smaller in size compared to the old one.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, second, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 1.00243902439 798% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 872.0 965.302439024 90% => OK
No of words: 191.0 196.424390244 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56544502618 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71756304063 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.26704593525 2.65546596893 85% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 106.607317073 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523560209424 0.547539520022 96% => OK
syllable_count: 243.9 283.868780488 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.5086649982 43.030603864 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 87.2 112.824112599 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1 22.9334400587 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6 5.23603664747 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208449872596 0.215688989381 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102653534546 0.103423049105 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0935423235615 0.0843802449381 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172650673177 0.15604864568 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10495546415 0.0819641961636 128% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 13.2329268293 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 61.2550243902 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 11.4140731707 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.81 8.06136585366 84% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 40.7170731707 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.