The diagrams below shows the changes that have taken place at west park secondary school since it’s construction in1950

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The diagrams below shows the changes that have taken place at west park secondary school since it’s construction in1950

The maps illustrate how West park Secondary school was transformed. They were separated into three main periods: 1950, 1980, and 2010. The process of transformation took 60 years, where just two things saved their locations (main road, school).

In 1980 living houses, which located next to school building, were replaced by car park and science block. While playground had not changed, territory of farmland had been removed to give space for new sport field.

To compare, in 2010, even though all facilities still existed in the map and the trio of science block, school and main road were remained and unchanged like it was in 1980, there were significant changes of area. Firstly, old sport field was squeezed into small size, so that one third of the acreage of playground was cut for sports field. Therefore freed land was occupied by car park, which grew into the biggest sector that accounted for nearly half of the chart.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 20, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Line 7, column 343, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
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Suggestion: Therefore,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, so, still, therefore, third, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 33.7804878049 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 782.0 965.302439024 81% => OK
No of words: 157.0 196.424390244 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98089171975 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.53976893118 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34801295445 2.65546596893 88% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 106.607317073 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.700636942675 0.547539520022 128% => OK
syllable_count: 209.7 283.868780488 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.8485705713 43.030603864 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.75 112.824112599 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.625 22.9334400587 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.75 5.23603664747 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0936027964774 0.215688989381 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0491352207341 0.103423049105 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635593904831 0.0843802449381 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0689480309803 0.15604864568 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0325953050688 0.0819641961636 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.2329268293 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 61.2550243902 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 11.4140731707 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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