The first chart shows the result of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100000 people asking travelled abroad and why they travelled the period 1994-1998. The second chart shows their destination over the same period.

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The first chart shows the result of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100000 people asking travelled abroad and why they travelled the period 1994-1998. The second chart shows their destination over the same period.

The two tables release the answers of 100,000 people who joined the survey related travelling industry. According to the survey, people asked if they travelled abroad, why they travelled for period from 1994 to 1998. besides, their destinations over the same period are also shown.

Firstly, there were many reasons for travelling abroad but the main of these were holiday, business and visits to friends and relatives. The most of people of the sample travelled for holiday and the numbers of those increased rapidly from 15,246 people in 1994 to 20,700 in 1998. In the same period, more and more people travelled abroad for business, visits to friends and relatives. there were 3,155 people who were asked travelled for business in 1994 but that number were 3,957 in 1998. The people of visits to friends and relatives reason group also increased by 500 person. For other reason, the number of people had movement and remained around 1000 persons for 4 years – got the pick in 1997 with 1054 persons.

Secondly, people choose western or north America when they travelled abroad. In 1994, 19371 people went to western and this number increased at 24,519 in 1998 although there was a bit decrease in 1995. this statement also occurred with north American destinations, the number respectively were 919 in 1994 and 1823 in 1998. besides, the people had travelled other areas increased from 1782 to 2486 in this period.

Conclusion, there were more and more people travelled aboard for these reasons above and western were the most favorite destination of them. In addition, the result also released people had higher standard lifestyle day by day.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 218, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Besides
...travelled for period from 1994 to 1998. besides, their destinations over the same perio...
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Line 3, column 78, Rule ID: WERE_VBB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'where' or 'we'?
Suggestion: where; we
...travelling abroad but the main of these were holiday, business and visits to friends...
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Line 3, column 142, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...nd visits to friends and relatives. The most of people of the sample travelled for holiday and...
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Line 3, column 387, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...iness, visits to friends and relatives. there were 3,155 people who were asked travel...
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Line 3, column 574, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'person' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'people', 'persons'.
Suggestion: people; persons
...ives reason group also increased by 500 person. For other reason, the number of people...
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Line 5, column 203, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...hough there was a bit decrease in 1995. this statement also occurred with north Amer...
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Line 5, column 325, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Besides
...vely were 919 in 1994 and 1823 in 1998. besides, the people had travelled other areas i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 6.8 206% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 5.60731707317 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 33.7804878049 118% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1384.0 965.302439024 143% => OK
No of words: 274.0 196.424390244 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05109489051 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 3.73543355544 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36456922008 2.65546596893 89% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 106.607317073 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.547539520022 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 394.2 283.868780488 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 8.94146341463 168% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.1453009001 43.030603864 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 92.2666666667 112.824112599 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2666666667 22.9334400587 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86666666667 5.23603664747 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 1.69756097561 412% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 3.70975609756 270% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296179071942 0.215688989381 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125527138836 0.103423049105 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100741090444 0.0843802449381 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216135727747 0.15604864568 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.1272719761 0.0819641961636 155% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.2329268293 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 61.2550243902 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 11.4140731707 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.06136585366 93% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 40.7170731707 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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