The following line graph shows the changes of average monthly salary and prices of black and white TV in Japanese Yen from 1953 to 1973

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The following line graph shows the changes of average monthly salary and prices of black and white TV in Japanese Yen from 1953 to 1973.

The line chart presents information about the average incomes and the prices black and white TV as well as color TV during the time span of two decades. Overall,an upward trend can be seen in terms of people’s salary while the prices of black and white TV as well as color TV.

To be precise,the average income in 1953 was 30,000 Yen per month and the price of a black and white TV is more than 3 times higher than that. With the next decade, the price of black and white TV was gradually dropping while the figure for monthly salary witnessed a significantly increase, exceeding that prices of black and white TV and reached 80,000 Yen in 1963. Meanwhile, a single color TV averagely retailed for 180,000 Yen in 1958 and this figured sharply went down to 110,000 Yen at the end of 1963, which is still more than 2 times higher than that of black and white TV in the same year. During the 1963 and 1973, the trajectory of monthly salary was sharply rising, reaching its peak at 180,000 Yen. By comparison, the prices of two types of TV both seen a decline, dropping to 30,000 Yen and 80,000 Yen respectively.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 267, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('significantly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('increase') instead of another adjective.
...the figure for monthly salary witnessed a significantly increase, exceeding that prices of black and whi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, still, well, while, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 916.0 965.302439024 95% => OK
No of words: 204.0 196.424390244 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49019607843 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77926670891 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42200519999 2.65546596893 91% => OK
Unique words: 102.0 106.607317073 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.547539520022 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 258.3 283.868780488 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.4926829268 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.7865500258 43.030603864 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.857142857 112.824112599 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.1428571429 22.9334400587 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42857142857 5.23603664747 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 3.83414634146 52% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366514296444 0.215688989381 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.199893102615 0.103423049105 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0591446141465 0.0843802449381 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.292633851972 0.15604864568 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0220974577789 0.0819641961636 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.2329268293 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.42 61.2550243902 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.35 11.4140731707 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.9970731707 124% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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