The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three m

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The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three m

Submitted by ANVAR.K on Tue, 12/15/2020 - 08:59

The line graph highlights medium monthly temperatures and the medium number of hours of sunshine per year in three
vital cities.
The monthly temperatures in London and New York experienced dramatically rise in the beginning, while Sydney started the period decreasing, and all of them have a little fluctuating.
It is clear that in January, London and New York were nearby 8 degree and 4 degree respectively. London's rate considerably rised until July almost 23 degree, however after the period it witnessed noticeably decline until at the end of the period 10 degree. New York witnessed the period 4 degree, and after that it moderately growing until July and it was nearby 29 degree, and this period finished with dropping until December it was 5 degree. Sydney encountered almost 25 degree in January, and continued levle off untill March. However it saw noticeably decline nearby 16 degree up to July, and then it experienced dramatically rise until end of the period 25 degree.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 115, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r of hours of sunshine per year in three vital cities. The monthly temperatures ...
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... and 4 degree respectively. Londons rate considerably rised until July almost 23 ...
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Line 4, column 464, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...mber it was 5 degree. Sydney encountered almost 25 degree in January, and continu...
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Line 4, column 533, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
..., and continued levle off untill March. However it saw noticeably decline nearby 16 deg...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, then, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 22.0 33.7804878049 65% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 826.0 965.302439024 86% => OK
No of words: 163.0 196.424390244 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06748466258 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57311423478 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80539207562 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 88.0 106.607317073 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539877300613 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 254.7 283.868780488 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.482926829268 1035% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.5004892335 43.030603864 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.0 112.824112599 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2857142857 22.9334400587 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.85714285714 5.23603664747 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0986757629738 0.215688989381 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.062829957535 0.103423049105 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.130505740236 0.0843802449381 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158029152787 0.15604864568 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.181696753637 0.0819641961636 222% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.2329268293 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 61.2550243902 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.3012195122 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 11.4140731707 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 40.7170731707 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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