The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below You should write at least 150 words

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The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
You should write at least 150 words.

The graph shows people using new music places on the Internet in fifteen days period of time namely personal choice and trendy pop music.

The overall trend shows fluctuation with slight Increased towards the end of the period.

Starting with Music Choice websites; 40,000 poeple went on this new site on first-day. Half of them backed out the next day. In Contrast to this Pop Parade net sites were visited by 120,000 music lovers on day one which decreased slightly on the next day thereafter regaining the same fame on 3rd day.

After 3rd day the enthusiasm for both music lines on Internet dropped slowly- reaching maximum fall of 40,000 on 7th day. Whereas Music choice gained popularity, slightly Improoving to get the original strength of 30,000 viewers on screen, but was getting still less visiters than their opponent Pop group i.e. 40,000 on day 7.

In the biegining of the next week both gained remarkable recovery after a few fluctuations for 8th and 9th day having 40,000 and 50,000 visiters respectively, reaching to their peaks of one and a half thousand new viewers for Pop Parade on 11th day showing a contrast of very few people visiting Music choice for the same day. Thereafter Music choice gained popularity on 12th day for having more than 120,000 new visiters on web.

In the end of the period Pop sites were visited by maximum viewers of 180,000 whereas sites located to Music choice were not explored by more than 80,000 explorers on the last day of the report.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 79, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... places on the Internet in fifteen days period of time namely personal choice and trendy pop m...
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Line 7, column 263, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun visiters is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...iewers on screen, but was getting still less visiters than their opponent Pop group ...
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Line 9, column 328, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thereafter,
...visiting Music choice for the same day. Thereafter Music choice gained popularity on 12th ...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, still, thus, whereas, in contrast, in contrast to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 33.7804878049 121% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1248.0 965.302439024 129% => OK
No of words: 257.0 196.424390244 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8560311284 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 3.73543355544 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34018793761 2.65546596893 88% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 106.607317073 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501945525292 0.547539520022 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 351.9 283.868780488 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.7612371301 43.030603864 181% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.8 112.824112599 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7 22.9334400587 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.9 5.23603664747 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 3.83414634146 156% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116667283484 0.215688989381 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0610899899869 0.103423049105 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0404388293843 0.0843802449381 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0696479787648 0.15604864568 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.038085668044 0.0819641961636 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.2329268293 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 61.2550243902 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 11.4140731707 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 40.7170731707 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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