The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on web.
The line graph illustrates the amount of people entering the two new music websites called “Music Choice” and “Pop Parade” during 15 days’ period.
According to the figures that the graph indicates, the number of people visiting “Music Choice” fluctuated between 20000 t0 60000 during first 11 days. On day 12 the amount of visitors rocketed to 110000 and hit its peak on the following day, which was equal to 120000, after that the number started to go down slowly.
On the other hand, “Pop Parade” had much more visitors than “Music Choice”, which were almost 120000 people. However, from that time on the number of them decreased gradually until reaching to about 40000 on ninth day. Then the sum of visits began to rise sharply except for the 40000’s decrease of the days 13 and 14 and reached top on the last day when the site draw 170000 people’s attention.
TThe line graph illustrates the amount of people entering the two new music websites called “Music Choice” and “Pop Parade” during 15 days’ period.
According to the figures that the graph indicates, the number of people visiting “Music Choice” fluctuated between 20000 t0 60000 during first 11 days. On day 12 the amount of visitors rocketed to 110000 and hit its peak on the following day, which was equal to 120000, after that the number started to go down slowly.
On the other hand, “Pop Parade” had much more visitors than “Music Choice”, which were almost 120000 people. However, from that time on the number of them decreased gradually until reaching to about 40000 on ninth day. Then the sum of visits began to rise sharply except for the 40000’s decrease of the days 13 and 14 and reached top on the last day when the site draw 170000 people’s attention.
To sum it up, taking all the information into account we can surely say “Pop Parade” has beaten “Music Choice” in terms of popularity through all the period apart from the days 13 and 14.o sum it up, taking all the information into account we can surely say “Pop Parade” has beaten “Music Choice” in terms of popularity through all the period apart from the days 13 and 14.
| Post date | Users | Rates | Link to Content |
|---|---|---|---|
| 2024-11-09 | trinhthanh1 | 78 | view |
| 2024-11-07 | hahoaan | 73 | view |
| 2024-11-03 | Giang Tran | 84 | view |
| 2024-11-02 | Giang Tran | 67 | view |
| 2024-11-02 | Giang Tran | 67 | view |
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e draw 170000 people's attention. To sum it up, taking all the information...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, then, apart from, except for, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 3.15609756098 380% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 14.0 5.60731707317 250% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 33.7804878049 198% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1920.0 965.302439024 199% => OK
No of words: 371.0 196.424390244 189% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17520215633 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 3.73543355544 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87662583702 2.65546596893 108% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 106.607317073 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.33423180593 0.547539520022 61% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 532.8 283.868780488 188% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 15.0 3.36585365854 446% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.6766484085 43.030603864 171% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.692307692 112.824112599 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5384615385 22.9334400587 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84615384615 5.23603664747 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 3.83414634146 183% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 3.70975609756 297% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0939510271192 0.215688989381 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0568087834383 0.103423049105 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.042336206078 0.0843802449381 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0761702870015 0.15604864568 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0392415007283 0.0819641961636 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.2329268293 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 61.2550243902 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.3012195122 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 11.4140731707 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.56 8.06136585366 81% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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