The graph below shows the number of hours per day on average that children spent watching television

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The graph below shows the number of hours per day on average that children spent watching television.

Submitted by mamun25 on Wed, 10/04/2023 - 12:32

The graph shows the number of hours per day on average that children spent watching television.
The graph covers the period between 1950 and 2010, and the vertica l axis indicates the number of hours
per day spent on watching television. \
From 1950 to 1960, there was a modest rise in the average nu~ber of hours children spent in front of
the television set . This was followed by a marked increase from approximately one hour to four hours of
viewing per day among children between 1965 and 1985. Over the next five yea rs, there was a decrease.
However, this t rend proved negligible as the viewing figure then rose again marginally. Then, there was
another modest decline in the hours children spent watching television.
Overall, it can be concluded that there has been a significant rise in television viewing over the sixty-year
period, though there is some indication that this trend may be changing.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 19, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...en spent in front of the television set . This was followed by a marked increase ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 20.0 33.7804878049 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 770.0 965.302439024 80% => OK
No of words: 155.0 196.424390244 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96774193548 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.52844152537 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56391382531 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 90.0 106.607317073 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58064516129 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 222.3 283.868780488 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.2235181364 43.030603864 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.25 112.824112599 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.375 22.9334400587 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25 5.23603664747 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 10.0 3.83414634146 261% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.46509108395 0.215688989381 216% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.224460885341 0.103423049105 217% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.238411942451 0.0843802449381 283% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204698400407 0.15604864568 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.218557517242 0.0819641961636 267% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.2329268293 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 61.2550243902 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 11.4140731707 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 40.7170731707 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 19, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...en spent in front of the television set . This was followed by a marked increase ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 20.0 33.7804878049 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 770.0 965.302439024 80% => OK
No of words: 155.0 196.424390244 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96774193548 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.52844152537 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56391382531 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 90.0 106.607317073 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58064516129 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 222.3 283.868780488 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.2235181364 43.030603864 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.25 112.824112599 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.375 22.9334400587 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25 5.23603664747 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 10.0 3.83414634146 261% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.46509108395 0.215688989381 216% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.224460885341 0.103423049105 217% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.238411942451 0.0843802449381 283% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204698400407 0.15604864568 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.218557517242 0.0819641961636 267% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.2329268293 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 61.2550243902 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 11.4140731707 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 40.7170731707 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------
Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.