The graph below shows the number of library books read by boys and girls at Starmouth School from 2009 to 2012 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The graph below shows the number of library books read by boys and girls at Starmouth School from 2009 to 2012
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given chart illustrates the information about how many library books read by males and females student at Starmouth School between 2009 and 2012.
As can be seen grom the graph, the number of students read books witnessed an upward trend over the period of time. While the most drammatic increase was seen in the amount of books read by girls.
Looking at the line graph, we can see that, in 2010, the number of books interested by boys were higher than girls, at 60 books and 25 books, in the next 2 years, books read by boys grew slightly at 80 in 2010 and increased moderately at 100 books in 2011, while books read by girls increased at 40 in 2010 and grew up rapidly at 100 books in 2011. This was the highest figure in the period.
From this point onwards, the amount of girls read library books saw a rise of 40 books in 2012, meanwhile, the amount of books droped slightly by 20 books in 2012 at Starmouth School.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 101, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ooks witnessed an upward trend over the period of time. While the most drammatic increase was ...
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Line 2, column 117, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...n upward trend over the period of time. While the most drammatic increase was seen in...
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Line 3, column 257, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...creased moderately at 100 books in 2011, while books read by girls increased at 4...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
look, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 758.0 965.302439024 79% => OK
No of words: 173.0 196.424390244 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.38150289017 4.92477711251 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62669911048 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.17520833272 2.65546596893 82% => OK
Unique words: 93.0 106.607317073 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537572254335 0.547539520022 98% => OK
syllable_count: 198.9 283.868780488 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.1 1.45097560976 76% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 98.6796162673 43.030603864 229% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 126.333333333 112.824112599 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8333333333 22.9334400587 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.83333333333 5.23603664747 35% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.333491478018 0.215688989381 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.156546460863 0.103423049105 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102979407969 0.0843802449381 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21840640572 0.15604864568 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0606735201714 0.0819641961636 74% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.2329268293 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 85.36 61.2550243902 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.72 11.4140731707 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.03 8.06136585366 87% => OK
difficult_words: 22.0 40.7170731707 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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