The graph below shows the proportions of workers in three different sections in South Korea from 1981 to 2011

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The graph below shows the proportions of workers in three different sections in South Korea from 1981 to 2011

The line charts indicates the shares of workforces in three disparity field in South Korea from 1981 to 2011. Overall, the proportions of laborers in South Korea comprised in agricultures, industry and services. While the percentages of services employees rose over the 30-years period, the proportions of agriculture staffs fell in 30 years, before standing at third-rank at last year. However, the percentage of industry workers ranked the second after 30 years and fluctuated from 1981 to 2001.
As regards, the proportions of services laborers started at under 40%, then rose to over 45% in 1991,before ascending gradually to 60% over the 10-years period. Lastly, it peaked at 70% in 2011 which was the highest in the graph. For the agriculture workers, it was a fall down from 1981 to 1991, after which it experienced a slow drop between 1996 to 2006, before hitting the low of nearly 5% in 2011.
The percentage of industry workers began increasing from under 30% to nearly 40%,after falling at 30% in 20011 and then decreased moderately to under 30%. It stopped at under 25% in 2011.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 71, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'field' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'fields'.
Suggestion: fields
...shares of workforces in three disparity field in South Korea from 1981 to 2011. Overa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, lastly, second, so, then, third, while, as regards

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 33.7804878049 151% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 910.0 965.302439024 94% => OK
No of words: 183.0 196.424390244 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97267759563 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67800887145 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75656927929 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 102.0 106.607317073 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55737704918 0.547539520022 102% => OK
syllable_count: 251.1 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 1.07073170732 654% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.4351399505 43.030603864 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.111111111 112.824112599 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3333333333 22.9334400587 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.55555555556 5.23603664747 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22538006403 0.215688989381 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108919552041 0.103423049105 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0806679488365 0.0843802449381 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147255016866 0.15604864568 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0749378289568 0.0819641961636 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.2329268293 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 61.2550243902 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 11.4140731707 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.06136585366 102% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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