The graph shows Japanese average monthly salary Yen from 1953 to 1983 and the prices of black and white television and color television during the same period

The line graph compares the medium monthly wage of Japanese and the prices of black and white, and color TV over a period of 30 years.
It is noticeable that the mean salary of Japanese every month went up significantly, whereas the television prices experienced a dramatic plunge between 1953 and 1953. Moreover, the cost of two kinds of TV were higher than that of Japanese salary in one month from 1970 to 1990.
In 1970, the price of black and white TV was sold for 110 thousand yen, which was the highest figure. However, that of black and white TV decreased significantly over 10 years, from 110 thousand yen to 40 thousand yen. The price of this type of TV gradually fell at 20 thousand yen in 2000, which was smaller than that of color TV, at about 45 thousand yen. Although the price of this means of entertainment was a hundred thousand yen when it first appeared in 1950, it declined to only a half at the end of the period.
At the begining of period, Japanese people only earned approximately 18 thousand yen once a month. This number continued to increase rapidly by 50 thousand yen between 1980 and 2000, at around 70 thousand yen.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd color TV over a period of 30 years. It is noticeable that the mean salary of...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, so, whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 33.7804878049 115% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 942.0 965.302439024 98% => OK
No of words: 208.0 196.424390244 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52884615385 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79765784423 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50959696427 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 106.607317073 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543269230769 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 270.0 283.868780488 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 23.8860463425 43.030603864 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 104.666666667 112.824112599 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1111111111 22.9334400587 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55555555556 5.23603664747 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308912360283 0.215688989381 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14319501218 0.103423049105 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0723140061142 0.0843802449381 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20604942205 0.15604864568 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0718127547096 0.0819641961636 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.2329268293 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.51 61.2550243902 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.29 11.4140731707 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.06136585366 90% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 40.7170731707 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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