The graph shows Japanese average monthly salary (Yen) from 1953 to 1983, and the prices of black and white television and color television during the same period.

Essay topics:

The graph shows Japanese average monthly salary (Yen) from 1953 to 1983, and the prices of black and white television and color television during the same period.

The line chart illustrates the amount of average income in each month and how much black and white TV and color TV costs were measured in Japan between 1953 and 1983.

According to the given information, at the beginning of the survey ( in 1953), the price of black and white TV was the highest at 110,000, while there were no statistics of colored TV at the same time. However, after a decade, Black and White TV’s price plummeted by 60,000 Yen, compared to the initial cost of colored TV was 100,000 Yen. The following 20 years witnessed a considerable decline in the figure for White-Black TV and Color TV, at 20,000 Yen and approximately 60,000 Yen respectively in 1983. By contrast, average wage each month accounted for under 20,000 Yen in 1954. And then the amount of average salary rose gradually to about 30,000 Yen by 1973 before overtaking price of color TV to reach below 70,000 Yen in 1983.

Overall, there was an opposite movement in the average wage of Japanese and the changes in the cost of black and white TV and colored TV over the 30-year period.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 67, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ormation, at the beginning of the survey in 1953, the price of black and white TV...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, then, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 0.0 5.60731707317 0% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 887.0 965.302439024 92% => OK
No of words: 190.0 196.424390244 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66842105263 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71268753763 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48887274376 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 98.0 106.607317073 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515789473684 0.547539520022 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 260.1 283.868780488 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 35.0667002923 43.030603864 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.714285714 112.824112599 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1428571429 22.9334400587 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.85714285714 5.23603664747 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269555201362 0.215688989381 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150556809782 0.103423049105 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0269793785926 0.0843802449381 32% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194142310018 0.15604864568 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0246481439887 0.0819641961636 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.2329268293 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 61.2550243902 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 11.4140731707 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 40.7170731707 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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