The graph shows the percentage of people who use mobile phones in four situations grouped by four age groups

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The graph shows the percentage of people who use mobile phones in four situations, grouped by four age groups.

The provided graph illustrates the change of mobile phone usage of one country for four situations in 2015 by age group

Overall, most citizens of all ages tended to use cell phones in public transportation, contrary to family dinners. Furthermore, it is uncommon for people aged 65 or over to use phones in a nutshell.

The initial impression from the graph is that the percentage of those who are on their phones while using public transport and in restaurants decline consistently, as the data was highest among the youngest group (18-29) at 90%. Meanwhile, the three remaining age groups (30-49, 50-64, 65+) witnessed decreases of 80%, 50% and 20%, respectively. Conversely to this popularity, family dinner had the lowest proportion of people using mobile phones, compared to other groups, with all brackets under 15%.

Furthermore, the figure for street and restaurant mobile usage represented a similar pattern. Particularly, people aged between 30 and 49 had the highest use of mobile phones with about 85% for street and 80% for the other situation, followed by 18-29 (>70%) , 50-64 ( >30%) and 65+ ( approximately 10%) age groups.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ituation, followed by 18-29 >70% , 50-64 >30% and 65+ approximately 10% age grou...
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...owed by 18-29 >70% , 50-64 >30% and 65+ approximately 10% age groups.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, furthermore, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 955.0 965.302439024 99% => OK
No of words: 184.0 196.424390244 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1902173913 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68302321012 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87826544633 2.65546596893 108% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 106.607317073 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.657608695652 0.547539520022 120% => OK
syllable_count: 278.1 283.868780488 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.7779498147 43.030603864 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.428571429 112.824112599 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2857142857 22.9334400587 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.28571428571 5.23603664747 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.373540558861 0.215688989381 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155411953758 0.103423049105 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0970077734565 0.0843802449381 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236524822852 0.15604864568 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0998978028528 0.0819641961636 122% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.2329268293 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 61.2550243902 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.3012195122 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 11.4140731707 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.06136585366 111% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 40.7170731707 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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