The graphs below show the numbers of male and female workers in 1975 and 1995 in severalemployment sectors of the republic of Freedonia.Write a report for a university teacher describing the information shown.You should write at least 150 words.You should

The graph shows six employment sectors in Freedonia, compared by sex; between 1975 and 1995. As we can notice a huge changes that appeared in the communication field, finance, banking, wholesale and retail trade. As women’ numbers of employment increased as we can see in 1975 was almost 300,000 employee and by 1995 reached almost 600,000 employee in communication field.
On the other hand; we can find that the men’s side didn't change as much as women’s, as men in most of the sectors in the same level without change of the employment as that appear in communication, wholesale, retail trade and public sector [non-defence].
moreover, we can find a small rise up from men in finance and banking as that was almost 400,000 employee in 1975 and by 1995 rose to be almost 500,000 employee, in public sector [Defence] exceeded 200,000 employee in 1995 after that was 200,000 employee in 1975.
Overall, we can find generally that women make a huge difference in a lot of sectors in employment instead of men, as their changes were so small and in most of the sectors keep the same level of employment.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 118, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'change'?
Suggestion: change
... 1975 and 1995. As we can notice a huge changes that appeared in the communication fiel...
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Line 3, column 57, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...d; we can find that the men's side didnt change as much as women's, as men ...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Moreover
...trade and public sector [non-defence]. moreover, we can find a small rise up from men i...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, so, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 1.00243902439 499% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 5.60731707317 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 33.7804878049 95% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 3.97073170732 302% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 934.0 965.302439024 97% => OK
No of words: 191.0 196.424390244 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89005235602 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71756304063 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81726965442 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 97.0 106.607317073 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507853403141 0.547539520022 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 262.8 283.868780488 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.4926829268 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.149871924 43.030603864 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.666666667 112.824112599 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.8333333333 22.9334400587 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.83333333333 5.23603664747 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0887113451742 0.215688989381 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0607856236573 0.103423049105 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615930898354 0.0843802449381 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0568717821285 0.15604864568 36% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0305863694159 0.0819641961636 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.2329268293 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.93 61.2550243902 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.3012195122 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 11.4140731707 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 40.7170731707 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.9970731707 131% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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