The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The chart presents the 3 different categories of music albums acquired by people in Britain in accordance to various gender and age.

Evidently, Rock Music is the most sort after music album in Britain, primarily by male consumers with 30% purchase, followed by female consumers (20%). This is followed by Pop Music and Classical Music with total purchase of 40% and 16% respectively, with higher demand by males in Classical Music and by females in Pop Music.

Rock Music is popular between people 16 to 34 years of age, with an average 30% purchase, and 20% in 35 to 44 age category. However, numbers decrease significantly above 45 years of age to 10%.

With an average 37% of sales, it is apparent that Pop Music is appreciated equally among people across ages of 16 to 44, although, numbers drop to 20% in people 45 years and above. It is noticeable that Classical Music is in low demand among younger people with barely any sales made, while it is increasingly sorted after by people after the age of 24, with an increase from 16% to 20% in purchases.

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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The chart presents the 3 different categ...
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Line 5, column 167, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...e seen in people 35 to 44 years of age. However numbers decrease significantly in peopl...
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Line 7, column 304, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'sorted'.
Suggestion: sorted
... with only 1%, while it is increasingly sort after by people after the age of 24, wi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 33.7804878049 166% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 941.0 965.302439024 97% => OK
No of words: 210.0 196.424390244 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48095238095 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80675409584 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46151327826 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 106.607317073 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471428571429 0.547539520022 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 288.0 283.868780488 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.4926829268 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.2726128495 43.030603864 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.428571429 112.824112599 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.0 22.9334400587 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.14285714286 5.23603664747 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192870391787 0.215688989381 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116338213369 0.103423049105 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0477202721452 0.0843802449381 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14615222246 0.15604864568 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0423692495358 0.0819641961636 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.2329268293 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.95 61.2550243902 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.3012195122 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.3 11.4140731707 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.9970731707 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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