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The bar chart compares the percentage of science certificate taken by citizens in two selected nations.

Overall,the majority of people in both countries didn’t have science qualification. Additionally, more Singaporean graduates majored science in university than people in Malaysia.

According to the graph, the propertion of people who hold Master’s degree is presented identically in two countries, at about 3%. By contrast, the percentage of Singaporean citizens who had Bachelor’ degree in science accounted for 20% of the total population, which was double the figure for Malaysian people.

However, there was a significant difference in the rate of people who lived in Malaysia or Singapore and left school early or didn’t held any science qualification. About 35% of individuals in Malaysia with school leaving exams, the figure for Singapore was slightly lower, at 30%. Regarding Maylaysia, nearly two-third had no certificate in science . Similarly, 60% of Singaporean citizens didn’t major in science.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...zens in two selected nations. Overall,the majority of people in both countries di...
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Line 7, column 355, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... two-third had no certificate in science . Similarly, 60% of Singaporean citizens ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, regarding, similarly, third

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 0.0 5.60731707317 0% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 3.97073170732 302% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 895.0 965.302439024 93% => OK
No of words: 152.0 196.424390244 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.88815789474 4.92477711251 120% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.51124308557 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.34213882445 2.65546596893 126% => OK
Unique words: 94.0 106.607317073 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.618421052632 0.547539520022 113% => OK
syllable_count: 275.4 283.868780488 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.45097560976 124% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.1136362821 43.030603864 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.4444444444 112.824112599 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8888888889 22.9334400587 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.23603664747 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.215688989381 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.103423049105 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0843802449381 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.15604864568 0% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0819641961636 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.2329268293 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.31 61.2550243902 63% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.3012195122 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.59 11.4140731707 145% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.06136585366 112% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 40.7170731707 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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