IELTS Writing task 1 Pie Chart The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50 year period Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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IELTS Writing task 1 - Pie Chart

The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The four pie charts make a comparison of the changes in the numbers of Asian, USA, European, and British tourists to Australia and Germany between 1960 and 2010. Overall, the proportion of Asian tourists in Australia experienced a significant increase while the proportion in the number of tourists to from four regions to Germany correlated positively from 1960 to 2010.

Regarding the percentages of tourism from Asia, starting at only a tenth in both two countries in 1960, these figures witnessed an increase to 63 and 25 percent in Australia and Germany respectively. In contrast, the number of European tourists in Australia, which counted for 53 percent in 1960, decreased significantly to a tenth while these figures in Germany dropped from 45 percent to two-fifths throughout the period.

By contrast, the numbers of British tourists in Australia and Germany accounted for 25 percent and 20 percent respectively in 1960, they decreased to a-fifth in Australia and only 6 percent in Germany during the period. The figures for the USA to Australia dropped slightly from 12 percent to 7 percent while these data in Germany witnessed an increase from 25 percent to 29 percent from 1960 to 2010.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, regarding, so, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 0.0 7.0 0% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 33.7804878049 139% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1011.0 965.302439024 105% => OK
No of words: 197.0 196.424390244 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13197969543 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74642080493 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88062009294 2.65546596893 108% => OK
Unique words: 83.0 106.607317073 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.421319796954 0.547539520022 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 291.6 283.868780488 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.4926829268 142% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 21.7689891563 43.030603864 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 168.5 112.824112599 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.8333333333 22.9334400587 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 5.23603664747 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0545978679038 0.215688989381 25% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0430087395858 0.103423049105 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0476846479598 0.0843802449381 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0464711910618 0.15604864568 30% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0262948056557 0.0819641961636 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.1 13.2329268293 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 61.2550243902 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.3012195122 142% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.07 11.4140731707 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.06136585366 110% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 40.7170731707 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.9970731707 135% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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