The illustrations show how chocolate is produced

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The illustrations show how chocolate is produced

Submitted by shayma on Thu, 01/30/2020 - 04:25

The diagram illustrate the way of generating chocolate.Overall, it can be seen that there are a total of ten stages, beginning with growing of cacao trees and culminating with production of chocolate.

To begin, cacao trees are grown in south America, Africa, and Indonesia. Once the ripe red pods are harvested, white cacao beans are collected. Next, these white cacao beans are fermented. Following this, beans are dried by spread them in sun.

When the beans are dried, they are put in large sacks. In the subsequent stage, these beans are transported to the factory by train or lorry. As soon as, beans are taken to the factory, they are roasted to 350 C. Soon after beans are crushed, outer shell are removed. In the final stage, the inner part of the beans are pressed and the liquid chocolate are produce.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 13, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'illustrates'.
Suggestion: illustrates
The diagram illustrate the way of generating chocolate.Overall...
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Line 1, column 56, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Overall
...ustrate the way of generating chocolate.Overall, it can be seen that there are a total ...
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Line 1, column 97, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'totals'?
Suggestion: totals
...verall, it can be seen that there are a total of ten stages, beginning with growing o...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 26, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hocolate. To begin, cacao trees are grown in south America, Africa, and Indo...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 7.0 229% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 19.0 33.7804878049 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 679.0 965.302439024 70% => OK
No of words: 141.0 196.424390244 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81560283688 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.44591672665 3.73543355544 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59611282899 2.65546596893 98% => OK
Unique words: 86.0 106.607317073 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.609929078014 0.547539520022 111% => OK
syllable_count: 211.5 283.868780488 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.4926829268 62% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.7756940329 43.030603864 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.9 112.824112599 60% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.1 22.9334400587 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.2 5.23603664747 4% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0382074866105 0.215688989381 18% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0129942199886 0.103423049105 13% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0270522912403 0.0843802449381 32% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0259556638008 0.15604864568 17% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.019843759892 0.0819641961636 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 13.2329268293 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 61.2550243902 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.08 11.4140731707 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.4329268293 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.9970731707 69% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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