Vaccination for flu was tried on the women of a large town in the countryside in the month of June during the year 1996 on an experimental basis. The bar chart indicates deaths from flu of the natives from March to August. The table illustrates the percentage of females who are at a maximum risk, out of those who were given vaccination. The lines on the third graph depict the number of death cases filed based on gender for a period of 11 months from February to December.
To begin with, the death of only one female from flu was reported before the experiment was conducted. This rose to a maximum of four during two months after June. As compared to this, only two males died during this period from June to August as a result of this epidemic.
Secondly, the table shows that the vaccine was given to only the females who were at a maximum risk from the disease, out of which 28% did not take part in the trial. Women who were senior citizens formed the largest group at 35% of those who took the vaccine and the smallest was formed by the ones who were hospitalized at a mere 13% of the total. Additionally, 24% were babies or children from those who were involved in the experiment.
From the line graph, it can be observed that the number of female deaths increased to 1000 in March and reached its peak in June with as many as 3500 women dying from the disease. After that, the death rate decreased and levelled to 2500 for the rest of the year. The figures for males show a similar trend, but at a lower value than that of their female counterparts.
Thus, it can be concluded that the vaccination had positive results as the death rates due to flu for both men an women of the town reduced significantly after the experiment was performed.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ut of those who were given vaccination. The lines on the third graph depict the num...
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...the death rates due to flu for both men an women of the town reduced significantly...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an woman' or simply 'women'?
Suggestion: an woman; women
...the death rates due to flu for both men an women of the town reduced significantly after...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, second, secondly, third, thus, as for, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 7.0 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 3.15609756098 412% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 16.0 5.60731707317 285% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 33.7804878049 181% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1441.0 965.302439024 149% => OK
No of words: 324.0 196.424390244 165% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.4475308642 4.92477711251 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 3.73543355544 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39317373403 2.65546596893 90% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 106.607317073 153% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503086419753 0.547539520022 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 450.9 283.868780488 159% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9345545365 43.030603864 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.928571429 112.824112599 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1428571429 22.9334400587 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28571428571 5.23603664747 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 1.13902439024 790% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160930106081 0.215688989381 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0647200477314 0.103423049105 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0770609360656 0.0843802449381 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0984567477456 0.15604864568 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0407392631158 0.0819641961636 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.2329268293 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.83 11.4140731707 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 40.7170731707 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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