The line chart above shows changes in the average money spent every month on children’s sports by parents from 2008 to 2010. The following graph compares the number of children taking part in three different physical activities, which are football, athl

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The line chart above shows changes in the average money spent every month on children’s sports by parents from 2008 to 2010. The following graph compares the number of children taking part in three different physical activities, which are football, athletics and swimming in the exact period.
It is clear that the medium of exchange spent on sports rises rather consistently. On the other hand, there were significant changes in the number of children participating in the three sports in the 6-year period.
In 2008, there were only about 500 children doing athletics, almost tripled by the number of those went for swimming, and the number of children choosing football was roughly 8 million. Contemporarily, the average funding for sports monthly was 20 pounds. In the next two years, the number of children participating in football and athletics remained relatively stable. However, the swimming figure saw a slight rise with 2.5 million children in 2010. Still, the amount of money spent every month was still rising steadily.
In the last four years of the period, both the amount of money spent on sports and the number of children taking part in swimming still showed signs of steady rise, reaching their highest of around 4 million children and 32 pounds. At the same time, statistics of children participating in athletics experienced a sudden rise from 2010 to 2012, peaked at 5 million, before dropping slightly in the next two years to approximately 4.5. As for the number of children taking part in football, continued to show a steady rise to almost 8 million in 2014.

The line chart above shows changes in the average money spent every month on children’s sports by parents from 2008 to 2010. The following graph compares the number of children taking part in three different physical activities, which are football, athletics and swimming in the exact period.
It is clear that the medium of exchange spent on sports rises rather consistently. On the other hand, there were significant changes in the number of children participating in the three sports in the 6-year period.
In 2008, there were only about 500 children doing athletics, almost tripled by the number of those went for swimming, and the number of children choosing football was roughly 8 million. Contemporarily, the average funding for sports monthly was 20 pounds. In the next two years, the number of children participating in football and athletics remained relatively stable. However, the swimming figure saw a slight rise with 2.5 million children in 2010. Still, the amount of money spent every month was still rising steadily.
In the last four years of the period, both the amount of money spent on sports and the number of children taking part in swimming still showed signs of steady rise, reaching their highest of around 4 million children and 32 pounds. At the same time, statistics of children participating in athletics experienced a sudden rise from 2010 to 2012, peaked at 5 million, before dropping slightly in the next two years to approximately 4.5. As for the number of children taking part in football, continued to show a steady rise to almost 8 million in 2014.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'charts'.
Suggestion: charts
The line chart above shows changes in the average mone...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, still, as for, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 33.7804878049 148% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1335.0 965.302439024 138% => OK
No of words: 264.0 196.424390244 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05681818182 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 3.73543355544 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71076654843 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 106.607317073 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511363636364 0.547539520022 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 374.4 283.868780488 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.9610127362 43.030603864 172% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.363636364 112.824112599 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 22.9334400587 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09090909091 5.23603664747 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.513202964396 0.215688989381 238% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.204668063742 0.103423049105 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.170188111233 0.0843802449381 202% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.377423933283 0.15604864568 242% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.284676717955 0.0819641961636 347% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.2329268293 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 61.2550243902 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 11.4140731707 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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