The line chart below shows the percentage of people in different age groups who played video games more than ten hours a week between 1984 and 2003.

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The line chart below shows the percentage of people in different age groups who played video games more than ten hours a week between 1984 and 2003.

The given graph illustrates the rate of people among separated age brackets spending over 10 hours per week playing computer games over the course of 19 years starting in 1984.

Looking at the graph, it is immediately obvious that the percentage of people of all age groups experienced an upward trend. Meanwhile, the rate of youngsters aged from 15 to 24 playing games registered the highest level out of 4 groups surveyed.

In 1984, the percentage of 15-24 category was at 20%. This figure then underwent a gradual increase to about 25% from 1984 to 1993 before fluctuating markedly and finally peaked at around 50%. A similar pattern could be seen in the proportion of 25-34 age bracket, which rocketed to nearly 30% at the end of the period.

At the beginning of the period, the 7-14 group stood at 13%, this was followed by an uneven rise to approximately 33% during the time studied. On the other hand, the proportion of people who are 35 years old show the same development but this pattern experienced more stable increase than that of in 7-14 group.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 188, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...he other hand, the proportion of people who are 35 years old show the same development ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, look, then, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 883.0 965.302439024 91% => OK
No of words: 185.0 196.424390244 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77297297297 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68801715136 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59337809319 2.65546596893 98% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 106.607317073 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.659459459459 0.547539520022 120% => OK
syllable_count: 252.0 283.868780488 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.0392636909 43.030603864 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.375 112.824112599 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.125 22.9334400587 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.23603664747 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235396340237 0.215688989381 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0972045414754 0.103423049105 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0612398266677 0.0843802449381 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13837955479 0.15604864568 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04800559903 0.0819641961636 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.2329268293 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 11.4140731707 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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