The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket

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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket

The map indicates two proposed sites for the supermarket to be built in garlsdon whose population reaches 65000.
Overall, the supermarket is planned to be build in town centre and countryside.
The first plan is in the town centre which is S2. Locating in S2 is very strategic since it will be in the middle of people's area. It will be surrounded by houses, making it convenient for the dwellers to do shopping .The location is just 16kms from bransdon having 15000 citizens and 12 kms from hindon with 10000 populations .But it is placed 25 kms from Cransdon that has the biggest population, 29000 citizens.Furthermore , the central area is a no--traffic zone , cars would be unable park and access would be difficult.
The second plan is to put up the supermarket in the suburb.Both the railway and mainroads are ready . In addition , it is very near hindon , a northwestern city 12 kms to the town centre.Nevertheless , the distance between thit site and brandson is relatively long .But the supermarket is near the railway so it is possible for the travellers to buy some food and goods here if there is a train station near .

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...eaches 65000. Overall, the supermarket is planned to be build in town centre an...
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...nvenient for the dwellers to do shopping .The location is just 16kms from bransdo...
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...enient for the dwellers to do shopping .The location is just 16kms from bransdon h...
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...ers to do shopping .The location is just 16kms from bransdon having 15000 citizen...
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...2 kms from hindon with 10000 populations .But it is placed 25 kms from Cransdon th...
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...kms from hindon with 10000 populations .But it is placed 25 kms from Cransdon that ...
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... the biggest population, 29000 citizens.Furthermore , the central area is a no--traffic zon...
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...t population, 29000 citizens.Furthermore , the central area is a no--traffic zone ...
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..., the central area is a no--traffic zone , cars would be unable park and access wo...
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...to put up the supermarket in the suburb.Both the railway and mainroads are ready . I...
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...ay and mainroads are ready . In addition , it is very near hindon , a northwestern...
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...y . In addition , it is very near hindon , a northwestern city 12 kms to the town...
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...near hindon , a northwestern city 12 kms to the town centre.Nevertheless , the di...
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...western city 12 kms to the town centre.Nevertheless , the distance between thit site and br...
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... 12 kms to the town centre.Nevertheless , the distance between thit site and bran...
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...hit site and brandson is relatively long .But the supermarket is near the railway ...
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...t site and brandson is relatively long .But the supermarket is near the railway so ...
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...ds here if there is a train station near .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, nevertheless, second, so, well, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 7.0 286% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 1.00243902439 399% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 933.0 965.302439024 97% => OK
No of words: 195.0 196.424390244 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78461538462 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73687570622 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08372929011 2.65546596893 116% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 106.607317073 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605128205128 0.547539520022 111% => OK
syllable_count: 270.0 283.868780488 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 124.229872513 43.030603864 289% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 133.285714286 112.824112599 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8571428571 22.9334400587 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2857142857 5.23603664747 196% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 1.69756097561 1119% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282639859571 0.215688989381 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143206194735 0.103423049105 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106622960536 0.0843802449381 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203401741889 0.15604864568 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0990619022566 0.0819641961636 121% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.2329268293 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 61.2550243902 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 11.4140731707 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.06136585366 105% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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