Nowadays celebrities are mainly famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To what extent do you agree and disagree?
In this day and age, it is said that celebrities are often well-known for their glamorous and luxurious lifestyles instead of their accomplishments and they are setting terrible examples to youngsters. While I partly agree with this notion, I still believe that some people are famous for their achievements and they are becoming ideal models so that teenagers can follow.
To begin with, a number of well-renowned people do not have the qualities that they should have had, which affects badly laddies. From time to time, many celebrities waste their money and time on awful things. They buy and wear clothes that have weird shapes, they tatoo everywhere on their body or they change their hair into a new and terrible style. Furthermore, they often glamorize impolite and illegal behaviours such as swearing, drinking alcohol, driving too fats, engaging in drug use. Others can have complex personal life or relate to sexual scandals. As a result, teenagers will emulate them as well as start doing everything that their idols often do including bad things. It means that a huge negative impact is put on the teenagers.
On the positive side, a lot of celebrities are really famous for their own talent and they are setting good examples of how to have and act. For instance, Katy Perry is a very well-known singer, not only for her accomplishments but also for her helpful social activities. She travels around the world raising fund to help poor and disadvantages children. A large number of African children have had opportunity to go to school, many African areas have escaped from poverty by virtue of her help. Moreover, she is also an ideal model of effort and determination to succeed in job for every young people to follow. Her good deeds are perfect examples that can have a positive influence on young generations.
To sum up, besides good famous people, there are some people are still bad examples for youngsters to imitate. Teenagers should aware of what and who they should follow to become better people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 356, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: Many; Numerous
...o help poor and disadvantages children. A large number of African children have had opportunity t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, if, moreover, really, so, still, well, while, for instance, such as, as a result, as well as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.0 186% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 1.00243902439 698% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 16.0 6.8 235% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.15609756098 317% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 38.0 5.60731707317 678% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1692.0 965.302439024 175% => OK
No of words: 341.0 196.424390244 174% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96187683284 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 3.73543355544 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6436262948 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 106.607317073 184% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574780058651 0.547539520022 105% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 283.868780488 187% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 1.53170731707 588% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 8.94146341463 190% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.5044434893 43.030603864 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5294117647 112.824112599 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0588235294 22.9334400587 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.88235294118 5.23603664747 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 1.13902439024 790% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286472817213 0.215688989381 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0874685186986 0.103423049105 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0796516697289 0.0843802449381 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18640931448 0.15604864568 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0594993483909 0.0819641961636 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.2329268293 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 61.2550243902 84% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 11.4140731707 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 40.7170731707 187% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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