The pie chart and the line graph shows the workforce and the unemployment in Australia from 1996 to 2003

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The pie chart and the line graph shows the workforce and the unemployment in Australia from 1996 to 2003.

The pie chart illustrates the percentage of workforce in Australia of difference groups while the line graph shows the proportion of unemployment in Australia of different groups between 1996 and 2003.

Overall, it can be seen that the percentage of workforce an Australian by birth was the highest whereas the unemployment rate was also the highest in Australian workforce.

According to the pie chart,the majority of workforce was an Australian by bath.In fact, over three quarters of workforce was Australian by birth.On the other hand, very less percentage 14% of workforce was non-english speaking people compared to the Australian workforce.Only 10% of workforce were non Australian who speak English.

The percentage of unemployment who were Australian by birth decreased dramatically from around 9 % to 4% between 1996 and 2003, a fall of 5% in 7 years. However,the similar pattern followed by Non Australian English speaking and Non-English speaking over the seven-year period.The unemployment of non Australian English speaking also decreased from 6 % to under 4% from 1996 to 2003 while Non English speaking fall 4% to about 1% in same period.These 3 group of unemployment was increased between 1998 and 1999.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, whereas, while, in fact, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 33.7804878049 124% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1037.0 965.302439024 107% => OK
No of words: 191.0 196.424390244 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42931937173 4.92477711251 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71756304063 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21697823509 2.65546596893 121% => OK
Unique words: 96.0 106.607317073 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502617801047 0.547539520022 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 289.8 283.868780488 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 22.4926829268 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 85.0848987776 43.030603864 198% => OK
Chars per sentence: 207.4 112.824112599 184% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.2 22.9334400587 167% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.0 5.23603664747 248% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 1.69756097561 412% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.13902439024 351% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303516953403 0.215688989381 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.197460291269 0.103423049105 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.161590550821 0.0843802449381 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212142974309 0.15604864568 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.175633383792 0.0819641961636 214% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.2 13.2329268293 175% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.37 61.2550243902 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.9 10.3012195122 164% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.81 11.4140731707 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 11.4329268293 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.2 10.9970731707 156% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.0658536585 154% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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