The pie chart compares the proportion of enrolments on six different courses at a UK collegeof education in 2010 and 2012

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The pie chart compares the proportion of enrolments on six different courses at a UK college
of education in 2010 and 2012

The pie chart compares the proportion of enrolments on six different courses at a UK college
of education in 2010 and 2012. Overall, it can be seen that the greatest change was in the
percentage of enrolments to the sports science courses.
In 2010, the most popular course was social studies, representing just over a quarter of all
enrolments, and although it was still a popular course, by 2012 it had fallen to one fifth of the
total. At 25.7%, nursing was the second most popular subject to study, but this fell
significantly to only 14% two years later. Initially, enrolment on the sports science course
was fairly low, at only 11.9%. However, this figure increased dramatically over the two years
to represent the largest proportion of enrolments in 2012 at 25.5%.
Less change was seen in the remaining three courses. Enrolments on the engineering course
went up slightly to 18.5% in 2012, but psychology remained virtually unchanged. This was
also the case for carpentry, which experienced very low levels of enrolment throughout the
period.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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...seen that the greatest change was in the percentage of enrolments to the sports s...
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... representing just over a quarter of all enrolments, and although it was still a ...
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...y 2012 it had fallen to one fifth of the total. At 25.7%, nursing was the second ...
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... popular subject to study, but this fell significantly to only 14% two years late...
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...ncreased dramatically over the two years to represent the largest proportion of e...
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...es. Enrolments on the engineering course went up slightly to 18.5% in 2012, but p...
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...y remained virtually unchanged. This was also the case for carpentry, which exper...
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...y low levels of enrolment throughout the period.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, second, so, still

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 898.0 965.302439024 93% => OK
No of words: 175.0 196.424390244 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13142857143 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63713576256 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80305372836 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 106.607317073 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605714285714 0.547539520022 111% => OK
syllable_count: 252.0 283.868780488 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.482926829268 621% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.7882338471 43.030603864 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.7777777778 112.824112599 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4444444444 22.9334400587 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55555555556 5.23603664747 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 12.0 3.83414634146 313% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 1.69756097561 707% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352257255852 0.215688989381 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.166302710201 0.103423049105 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.25361448718 0.0843802449381 301% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135650957341 0.15604864568 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.175972450356 0.0819641961636 215% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 61.2550243902 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 11.4140731707 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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