The pie chart shows percentage of people working in different sectors between Town A and Town B in 2 different years in 1960 and 2010

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The pie chart shows percentage of people working in different sectors between Town A and Town B in 2 different years in 1960 and 2010.

The pie chart gives information about the change in the employment division between Town A and Town B in 2 different years in 1960 and 2010.

What stands out from the graph is that almost citizens in town A focused on working in manufacturing, which was the most interesting job for the workers in the city. While sales sectors made up the highest percentage of the workforce in town B

Looking at the chart for more details, it can be seen that in 1960, the majority of sales factors in town A attracted a large number of people, about 40%. at the same time, the proportion of manufacturing and services had the lower figures, at 29% and 30% respectively. 50 years later, manufacturing factors surpassed the other 2 data and became the highest percentage of workers. Regarding services and sales, both of them had a considerably reduce, at 16% and 20% respectively.

Turning into town B, starting at 70%, sales jobs accounted for the highest point in 1960, but then it saw a decline of sectors in 2010, from 70% to 35%. By contrast, the employees who worked in services and manufacturing had a noticeable change in growth, 22% and 25% respectively.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 167, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...esting job for the workers in the city. While sales sectors made up the highest perce...
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Line 5, column 119, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ty of sales factors in town A attracted a large number of people, about 40%. at the same time, th...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: At
...ed a large number of people, about 40%. at the same time, the proportion of manufa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, regarding, then, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 961.0 965.302439024 100% => OK
No of words: 202.0 196.424390244 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75742574257 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76996954942 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89595497888 2.65546596893 109% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 106.607317073 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579207920792 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 278.1 283.868780488 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.6471093683 43.030603864 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.125 112.824112599 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.25 22.9334400587 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.625 5.23603664747 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324554849033 0.215688989381 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130076685875 0.103423049105 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.157994723788 0.0843802449381 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228225495888 0.15604864568 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.167554224879 0.0819641961636 204% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.2329268293 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 61.2550243902 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 11.4140731707 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 40.7170731707 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.4329268293 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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