The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years

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The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years.

The two pie charts juxtapose various sorts of equipment used by people aged 18 - 25 to enjoy TV programs in Canada in 2009 and 2019.

An initial inspection of the charts reveals considerable changes in the percentages. Another notable point is the transition from conventional TV to other more advanced facilities in 2019.

The usage of conventional TV was dominant with one-third of people using it in 2009. However, it took a nosedive to below 5% in 2019. The same trend was also seen in the data of two kinds of computer users. While laptop usage percentage declined from one-fifth to over 10%, a 6% drop was recorded in the desktop computer sector within 10 years.

The other factors in the pie chart had a similar increasing trend. The most significant improvement belonged to the data of flatten-screen TV, with an approximately one-fifth surge within a decade. The two remaining devices also recorded an enormous accrue, 14% for the tablet’s figure, and 11% for the mobile phone’s.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 103, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ople using it in 2009. However, it took a nosedive to below 5% in 2019. The same trend was...
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Line 7, column 149, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('approximately') instead an adjective, or a noun ('one-fifth') instead of another adjective.
... to the data of flatten-screen TV, with an approximately one-fifth surge within a decade. The two remainin...
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Line 7, column 199, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...mately one-fifth surge within a decade. The two remaining devices also recorded an ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, third, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 834.0 965.302439024 86% => OK
No of words: 167.0 196.424390244 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99401197605 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.59483629437 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88888616344 2.65546596893 109% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 106.607317073 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.634730538922 0.547539520022 116% => OK
syllable_count: 250.2 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.9899983328 43.030603864 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.4 112.824112599 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7 22.9334400587 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.23603664747 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194760727242 0.215688989381 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0730673624228 0.103423049105 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0974696262495 0.0843802449381 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131800788493 0.15604864568 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.127031229553 0.0819641961636 155% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.2329268293 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 61.2550243902 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.3012195122 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 11.4140731707 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.06136585366 115% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 40.7170731707 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.4329268293 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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