The pie charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by akbarf on Tue, 12/17/2019 - 02:51

Given are diagrams illustrating the percentage of industrial, agricultural and domestic use of water in six different areas of the world . In Africa, South America, Central and South East Asia more then 70% percent of water goes to the agricultural use whereas in North America and Europe this present 39 and 32 % respectively opposite there areas consume more water for industrial purposes 48% and 53 % while industrial targets require only about 10 % average in South America Africa Central and South East Asia. The biggest persentage of domestic water use can be observed is in the minimum water for domestic needs the top using water for agricultural purposes is in central Asia 89% and only 32 % of water is used by the European agricultural sector

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 137, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ater in six different areas of the world . In Africa, South America, Central and S...
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Line 1, column 199, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[2]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...erica, Central and South East Asia more then 70% percent of water goes to the agricu...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, then, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 16.0 33.7804878049 47% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 625.0 965.302439024 65% => OK
No of words: 124.0 196.424390244 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04032258065 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.33699396548 3.73543355544 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7882633655 2.65546596893 105% => OK
Unique words: 73.0 106.607317073 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.588709677419 0.547539520022 108% => OK
syllable_count: 207.0 283.868780488 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 3.0 8.94146341463 34% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 41.0 22.4926829268 182% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 96.6793095181 43.030603864 225% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 208.333333333 112.824112599 185% => OK
Words per sentence: 41.3333333333 22.9334400587 180% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.33333333333 5.23603664747 178% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 3.83414634146 26% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203691057216 0.215688989381 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.171502138832 0.103423049105 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0749240154828 0.0843802449381 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203691057216 0.15604864568 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0819641961636 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.0 13.2329268293 174% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 21.4 61.2550243902 35% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.51609756098 200% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.5 10.3012195122 199% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.84 11.4140731707 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.87 8.06136585366 122% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 40.7170731707 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.4329268293 166% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.4 10.9970731707 167% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.
Minimum two paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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