The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by Elmi on Mon, 09/03/2018 - 18:07

According to the given maps, it illustrates the layout of the sports centre of a university before reconstruction and how it will look like after it has been renovated partially.The sports centre will have three Changing Rooms instead of one, two dance studios, the Gym will be bigger, there will be a Café, a Sports shop as well as a Sports Hall. In addition to that, there is going to be two swimming pools, that is, the main pool and an even bigger Leisure Pool.

To start with, in the first image, is it clear that the university has approximately 25 meter pool, which is surrounded by a Changing Room, Gym, Seating area and a Reception at the entrance of the sports centre. It also has two outdoor courts on both west and east sides of the sports centre.

Furthermore, the future plan is to destroy the outdoor courts and then replace them with more suitable facilities like, Leisure Pool, Changing Room and a Sports shop on the west side, and on the east side, there is going be a Sports Hall, two small Dance Studios, a Changing Room and a Café.

To sum up, the university sports centre will seem bigger then it is now, even though the Changing Room, Gym, Seating are and Reception that surrounded the mail pool will not be vandalised.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 179, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...e after it has been renovated partially.The sports centre will have three Changing ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, look, so, then, well, in addition, as well as, to start with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 1.00243902439 599% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 24.0 33.7804878049 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1029.0 965.302439024 107% => OK
No of words: 225.0 196.424390244 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57333333333 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87298334621 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47310870498 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 106.607317073 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502222222222 0.547539520022 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 299.7 283.868780488 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 22.4926829268 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 92.8313883698 43.030603864 216% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 171.5 112.824112599 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.5 22.9334400587 164% => OK
Discourse Markers: 16.1666666667 5.23603664747 309% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178426882034 0.215688989381 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0893425324482 0.103423049105 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0769497140811 0.0843802449381 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114551824621 0.15604864568 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0669062031746 0.0819641961636 82% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 13.2329268293 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.3 61.2550243902 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.3012195122 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.82 11.4140731707 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 28.0 40.7170731707 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.4329268293 166% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 10.9970731707 153% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.0658536585 172% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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