The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

Submitted by doubletee on Wed, 08/07/2019 - 06:31

Those two maps illustrate the layout of Grange Park in 1920 and 79 years later in 2019. It is readily apparent that many changes were made to the Park arrangement, ranging from the west side to the east side of the park.

The most noticeable changes were made in the center area of Grange Park. Previously, Fountain was situated in the center of the Park. But, in today's layout, it has been replaced by a Rose Garden that is surrounded by Seats, which were previously placed separately. Apart from that, there are also changes in the west area of the Park, where Stage for Musicians, that was formerly located next to Fountain, has been demolished and replaced by Amphitheater for Concerts. Furthermore, the Rose Garden in the bottom side that was exist in 1920's layout has been removed in 2019.

Besides that, there were also changes in the east area. The first one is in the northeastern area, where Rose Garden is replaced by Cafe, and Pond for Water Plants is replaced by Children's Play Area, respectively. The next changes is referring to the replacement of Glasshouse by a Water Feature in the northeastern area. And the last change is regard to the installment of Entrance Underground Car Park which previously was not exist in 1920.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 527, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'existed'.
Suggestion: existed
...Rose Garden in the bottom side that was exist in 1920s layout has been removed in 201...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 533, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 1920s'.
Suggestion: in the 1920s
...arden in the bottom side that was exist in 1920s layout has been removed in 2019. Bes...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 430, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'existed'.
Suggestion: existed
...round Car Park which previously was not exist in 1920.
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, so, apart from, as for

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 7.0 271% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.15609756098 317% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1033.0 965.302439024 107% => OK
No of words: 216.0 196.424390244 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78240740741 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.83365862548 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62286803488 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486111111111 0.547539520022 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 310.5 283.868780488 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.970276771 43.030603864 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.9090909091 112.824112599 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6363636364 22.9334400587 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63636363636 5.23603664747 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.09268292683 244% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111892234613 0.215688989381 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0496190403215 0.103423049105 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.03610281994 0.0843802449381 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.088283983301 0.15604864568 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.027812451735 0.0819641961636 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.2329268293 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 61.2550243902 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 11.4140731707 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 40.7170731707 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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