Some argue that music mainly serves as a way for individuals to reduce their stress and anxiety.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people believe that music primarily contributes to energy replenishment and anxiety reduction. From my perspective, while I agree that these are significant functions of music, it also plays a crucial role in reinforcing motivation and promoting personal growth in life.
It is understandable why many people believe that music helps alleviate stress and anxiety. To begin with, most songs are composed with harmonious melodies and meaningful lyrics, which assist individuals in alleviating feelings of tension and apprehension. This is especially beneficial for students and employees who face heavy workloads and multiple tasks that they must complete to keep up with the progress of their peers. Additionally, while commuting to work or driving home, people may find themselves stuck in traffic, which can lead to frustration and irritability. In these situations, music can help people stay calm and enjoy the ride. To meet the needs of many, music streaming applications have been created, allowing people to listen to music wherever they are, providing a means to prevent stress and anxiety.
However, another beneficial aspect of music that cannot be overlooked is its ability to boost motivation and foster personal development. Indeed, people may struggle with generating new ideas to make their work more appealing, improve the quality of production, and increase revenue for their companies. Music can serve as a powerful tool to inspire creativity and innovation through its sweet melodies and uplifting rhythms. Moreover, when faced with challenges and difficulties, people often feel like giving up due to a lack of motivation. In such circumstances, music can be a vital key to overcoming these obstacles by reducing stress and anxiety, and providing individuals with the inspiration and solutions they need to persevere, which can ultimately contribute to their success.
In conclusion, while the primary advantage of music is its ability to relieve stress and reduce anxiety, its contribution to enhancing motivation and personal growth is undeniable.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 128, Rule ID: EN_GB_SIMPLE_REPLACE
Message: I is a common American expression, in British English it is more common to use: I
Suggestion: I
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, while, as to, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 1.00243902439 998% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 21.0 6.8 309% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.15609756098 317% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 25.0 5.60731707317 446% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 33.7804878049 133% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 3.97073170732 302% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1768.0 965.302439024 183% => OK
No of words: 317.0 196.424390244 161% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.57728706625 4.92477711251 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 3.73543355544 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0375682455 2.65546596893 114% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 106.607317073 180% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605678233438 0.547539520022 111% => OK
syllable_count: 548.1 283.868780488 193% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.1615971598 43.030603864 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.285714286 112.824112599 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6428571429 22.9334400587 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.23603664747 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 3.70975609756 270% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.13902439024 351% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180538430956 0.215688989381 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0616961763361 0.103423049105 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0381825348269 0.0843802449381 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111706923428 0.15604864568 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0191100323293 0.0819641961636 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.2329268293 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 61.2550243902 66% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.3012195122 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.38 11.4140731707 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.71 8.06136585366 120% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 40.7170731707 246% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.4329268293 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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