Health of the human is the top concern of the whole world . the Goverments of the countries have tried to find out the solution to improve , enhance the labor productivity and job performance. However , there is a fact that in some countries the average weight of people is growing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. Now we will investigate and analyze this issue in order to find the causes and appropriate solutions.
There are various of reasons that cause the obesity. Firstly , the main factor which lead to overweight of people is food and the most popular food in the world is fast food . There are a lot of famous fast food brands like MCDONAL,jOLLIBE,LOTTERIA and so on with many small branches and stores all over the world. People like this kind of food because it is very cheap and convenient for those who work much without time to cook for themselves or go to the restaurant to have meal . Secondly people do less exercises than before especially some people work as secretary or officer because they spend almost their time in front of computer . Finally , the more development of technology is , the fatter of people is. As far as i know, the number of people addicted to tv and social media is increasing day by day which lead to the laziness of people . Therefore the levels of health and fitness are decreasing
To solve this problem i think we need some appropriate measures . First of all , we should have a healthy balance diet with vegetables and fruits in stead of fast food . It brings a much more effective than you think . In addition , You also need a reasonable exercise regime to get fit and stay in shape . Moreover , you should work less and concern more about society activities or outside activities with your friends or family . We can go camping, go hiking on the mountain , visit the countryside, go swimming in the beach and so on . This is not only helps you have good health and blow your mind but also have more wonderful experiences and moments with your close people . Doing exercises by go to the new lands or discover some new things that you have not known before will more interesting and make your life more enjoyable and more meaning than ever.
In conclusion, although In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are going down , if we pay more attention to our lifestyles you will get a better life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 7.0 229% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 1.00243902439 798% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 27.0 6.8 397% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 5.60731707317 589% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 33.7804878049 178% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1987.0 965.302439024 206% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 425.0 196.424390244 216% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67529411765 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 3.73543355544 122% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65759948213 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 106.607317073 198% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496470588235 0.547539520022 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 617.4 283.868780488 217% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 1.53170731707 392% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 8.94146341463 224% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.8376325812 43.030603864 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.35 112.824112599 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.25 22.9334400587 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.95 5.23603664747 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 35.0 1.69756097561 2062% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 3.70975609756 404% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25619815009 0.215688989381 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0810205983424 0.103423049105 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100488962196 0.0843802449381 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18372576852 0.15604864568 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0643291892888 0.0819641961636 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.2329268293 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 61.2550243902 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 11.4140731707 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 40.7170731707 182% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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