Some people believe that schools should only teach subjects which are beneficial to childrens future career and therefore other subjects such as music and sports are not important . To what extent do you agree or disagree ?
In this modern era , competitiveness is considered as an essential virtue for the financial growth and development of the children so that's why some people think that school should eliminate non academic subjects like music and sports . In my opinion ,both academic and non academic subjects are vital for the childrens future because each are provided its own skills for students .
To begin with , academic subjects give a practical knowledge that should be fruitful for children . They learn a lot when they studies academic subjects like history , science , economics etcetera .It helps to get the required job and achieved the dreams . For instance , in Vietnam engineering graduated students got a handsome salary and all other facilities .however,on the basis of academic subjects marks students can get the job .Nowadays many students focused on academic subjects to make goals .
On the other hand , subjects like art and music helps students to broaden their skills . Sports are significant for the physical growth of children whereas music are important for the relaxation .children's are very creative . They learn a lot through non academic subjects like how to interact with others , team spirit ,leadership quality and so on .hence , such activities are boon for them . When students started to show interest in these activities then they are away from bad things . These subjects are vital because some students are overburdened by academic subjects .
In gist , I do admit that both subjects have its own value . Students learned a lot through these subjects . It is essential for the overall development of the children .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, so, then, whereas, for instance, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 5.60731707317 339% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 33.7804878049 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1374.0 965.302439024 142% => OK
No of words: 258.0 196.424390244 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32558139535 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 3.73543355544 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76914486174 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 106.607317073 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550387596899 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 417.6 283.868780488 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 1.53170731707 392% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 61.4904620496 43.030603864 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.692307692 112.824112599 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8461538462 22.9334400587 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.69230769231 5.23603664747 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 38.0 1.69756097561 2239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 3.70975609756 243% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229377788145 0.215688989381 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.09910879063 0.103423049105 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0510712713494 0.0843802449381 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159852269673 0.15604864568 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0324530337707 0.0819641961636 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.2329268293 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 61.2550243902 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 11.4140731707 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 40.7170731707 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.4329268293 136% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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