The table below gives information about the average annual spending of university students in 3 different countries.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table below gives information about the average annual spending of university students in 3 different countries.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The give data represents the average annual expenditure of students in 3 countries. The

country instituted the highest in total spending was Country A. In contrast, The least

amount of spending was done by Country C. besides, All of three country also spent

the highest amount on Accommodation item.

According the given data. The accommodation is the most outstanding. It is shown 45%,

35% and 30% in country A, B, C. And it allocated the highest amount in three country.

And it the most reason for creating total expenditure in each country. Food and leisure

items is instituted around 22% in country A and B. while it is different in country C with

36% in food and 12% in leisure.

Although, Country A is accounted for the greatest in total expenditure with 5000 USD,

there are some items is less than country B and C, such as Food and books. While

country A this item is allocated for 22% and 3%, country B and C higher than that with

28% and 9% in country B and 36% and 21% in country C. There are the remarkable

thing. Although country C is the least amount of expenditure in total but it is allocated

highest in items Food and books. And country C is the lowest percentage with 1% in

others different living costs.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...enditure of students in 3 countries. The country instituted the highest in total ...
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...besides, All of three country also spent the highest amount on Accommodation item...
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...es, All of three country also spent the highest amount on Accommodation item. ...
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...s the most outstanding. It is shown 45%, 35% and 30% in country A, B, C. And it a...
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...diture in each country. Food and leisure items is instituted around 22% in countr...
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... while it is different in country C with 36% in food and 12% in leisure. Altho...
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...test in total expenditure with 5000 USD, there are some items is less than countr...
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...y B and C, such as Food and books. While country A this item is allocated for 22%...
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...ch as Food and books. While country A this item is allocated for 22% and 3%, count...
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...%, country B and C higher than that with 28% and 9% in country B and 36% and 21% ...
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...% in country C. There are the remarkable thing. Although country C is the least a...
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...country C. There are the remarkable thing. Although country C is the least amount...
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...expenditure in total but it is allocated highest in items Food and books. And cou...
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...diture in total but it is allocated highest in items Food and books. And country C ...
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...ry C is the lowest percentage with 1% in others different living costs.
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...is the lowest percentage with 1% in others different living costs.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, so, while, in contrast, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 6.8 235% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1060.0 965.302439024 110% => OK
No of words: 222.0 196.424390244 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77477477477 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8600083453 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6656773183 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 106.607317073 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.45045045045 0.547539520022 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 290.7 283.868780488 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.482926829268 621% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 8.94146341463 179% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 22.4926829268 58% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.5024999167 43.030603864 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 66.25 112.824112599 59% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.875 22.9334400587 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.4375 5.23603664747 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 16.0 3.83414634146 417% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 16.0 1.69756097561 943% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.09268292683 269% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0465870546111 0.215688989381 22% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0240565821993 0.103423049105 23% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.056125670303 0.0843802449381 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0238538852554 0.15604864568 15% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0563200512403 0.0819641961636 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 13.2329268293 60% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 83.66 61.2550243902 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 4.8 10.3012195122 47% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.79 11.4140731707 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.91 8.06136585366 86% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 11.4329268293 39% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.9970731707 65% => OK
text_standard: 5.0 11.0658536585 45% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
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Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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