The table below shows employment patterns for males and females in New Zealand in 1993 and 2003

Submitted by Florah on Mon, 11/11/2019 - 15:35

The table gives information about the ways men and women were gainfully employed in New Zealand in 1993 and 2003.

Overall, it is seen that out of the six given sectors, the females were more employed in three in the first year. The males were given more job opportunities in four economic sections in the second year.

In 1993, the recruitment process in New Zealand favoured more women in three departments. These sections were, services and transport, manufacturing, and social services. The number of employed female staff are 53, 25 and 13 respectively as against 22, 16 and 5 men in those sectors. Agriculture and business took more men than women. It is worthy to note that no woman was given an employment in the building sector in that year.

However, in 2003, a lot of the male gender got job offers than their female counterparts in four units out of the 6 that were given. The farming, trade, production and construction sectors were dominated by 8, 25, 17 and 10 men respectively, while 6, 22, 12 and 6 women reciprocally were employed alongside. The remaining two sectors which were services and transport, and social services engaged more females than males.

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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, second, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 23.0 33.7804878049 68% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 982.0 965.302439024 102% => OK
No of words: 201.0 196.424390244 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8855721393 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76529505866 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77417503549 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 106.607317073 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577114427861 0.547539520022 105% => OK
syllable_count: 288.9 283.868780488 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.6297538054 43.030603864 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.2727272727 112.824112599 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2727272727 22.9334400587 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.23603664747 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203872178446 0.215688989381 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0834740152342 0.103423049105 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0838459149778 0.0843802449381 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154997510603 0.15604864568 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0879660803645 0.0819641961636 107% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.2329268293 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 61.2550243902 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 11.4140731707 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 40.7170731707 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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