Technology
Experts throughout both the developing and developed world have debated whether the advent of sophisticated modern technology such as mobile phones, laptops and iPad have helped to enhance and improve people's social lives or whether the opposite has become the case.
Personally, I strongly advocate the former view. This essay will discuss both sides using examples from the UK government and Oxford University to demonstrate points and prove arguments.
On the one hand there is ample, powerful, almost daily evidence that such technology can be detrimental especially to the younger generation who are more easily affected by it’s addictive nature and which can result in people feeling more isolated from the society.
The central reason behind this is twofold, firstly, the invention of online social media sites and apps, such as Twitter and Facebook have reduced crucial face-to-face interactions dramatically. Through use of these appealing and attractive mediums, people feel in touch and connected yet lack key social skills and the ability to communicate.
Secondly, dependence on such devices is built up frighteningly easily which may have a damaging effect on mental health and encourage a sedentary lifestyle. For example, recent scientific research by the UK government demonstrated that 90% of people in their 30s spend over 20 hours per week on Messenger and similar applications to chat with their friends instead of meeting up and spending quality time together or doing sport. As a result, it is conclusively clear that these technology advancements have decreased and diminished our real life interactions.
On the other hand, although there are significant downsides to technological developments, its’ multifold advantages cannot be denied. This is largely because the popularity of technology such as cellphones allows people to connect freely and easily with no geographical barriers.
People are able to share any type of news, information, photos and opinions with their loved ones whenever and wherever they want therefore keeping a feeling of proximity and closeness. For example, an extensive study by Oxford University illustrated that people who work, or study abroad and use applications like Facetime and WhatsApp to chat with their families, are less likely to experience loneliness and feel out of the loop than those who do not.
Consistent with this line of thinking is that businessmen are also undoubtedly able to benefit from these advances by holding virtual real -time meetings using Skype which may increase the chance of closing business deals without the need to fly.
From the arguments and examples given I firmly believe that overall communication and mans’ sociability has been advanced enormously due to huge the huge technological progress of the past twenty years and despite some potentially serious health implications which governments should not fail to address, it is predicted that its popularity will continue to flourish in the future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 7.0 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 1.00243902439 898% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 29.0 6.8 426% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 14.0 3.15609756098 444% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 28.0 5.60731707317 499% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 33.7804878049 184% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.97073170732 227% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2567.0 965.302439024 266% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 465.0 196.424390244 237% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52043010753 4.92477711251 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 3.73543355544 124% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90077475189 2.65546596893 109% => OK
Unique words: 289.0 106.607317073 271% => Less unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.621505376344 0.547539520022 114% => OK
syllable_count: 807.3 283.868780488 284% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 1.53170731707 392% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 8.94146341463 168% => OK
Sentence length: 31.0 22.4926829268 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.9233931293 43.030603864 188% => OK
Chars per sentence: 171.133333333 112.824112599 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.0 22.9334400587 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.73333333333 5.23603664747 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 9.0 3.83414634146 235% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 3.70975609756 297% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169917911421 0.215688989381 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0625942027303 0.103423049105 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804627378801 0.0843802449381 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0781699357854 0.15604864568 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0843483812068 0.0819641961636 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.1 13.2329268293 152% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.55 61.2550243902 52% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.51609756098 200% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 10.3012195122 161% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.33 11.4140731707 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.47 8.06136585366 130% => OK
difficult_words: 156.0 40.7170731707 383% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.4329268293 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.9970731707 131% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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