The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

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The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

The two graphs provides the proportion of online shopping sales for retail sectors in two years, 2005 and 2010 in Canada.
Overall, the number of online shopping in Canada changed significantly from 2005 to 2010. Then the figures for Food, Beverage and Video games was rose slightly, the other two sectors fell.
Looking more closely at the two pie charts, the trends for Food, Beverage and Electronics & Appliance were noticeably change. In Food and Beverage, the consumption increased from 22% in 2005 to 32% in 2010. Electronics and Appliance, by contrast, in 2005 to 2010 period was dropped gradualy by 5%.
On the other hand, while the percentage of Videogames an upward trend, a downward could be seen at Home Furnishings. To give a concrete proof, the number of Videogames was bounced from 18% in 2005 to 23% in 2010, through the online shopping of Home Furnishings was reduced slightly from 25% to 15% over the period.

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...e. In Food and Beverage, the consumption increased from 22% in 2005 to 32% in 2...
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...age, the consumption increased from 22% in 2005 to 32% in 2010. Electronics and...
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...tion increased from 22% in 2005 to 32% in 2010. Electronics and Appliance, by c...
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...e Furnishings. To give a concrete proof, the number of Videogames was bounced fr...
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... in 2010, through the online shopping of Home Furnishings was reduced slightly f...
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...the online shopping of Home Furnishings was reduced slightly from 25% to 15% ove...
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...ightly from 25% to 15% over the period.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, then, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 0.0 5.60731707317 0% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 774.0 965.302439024 80% => OK
No of words: 157.0 196.424390244 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92993630573 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.53976893118 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65334089664 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 93.0 106.607317073 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.592356687898 0.547539520022 108% => OK
syllable_count: 217.8 283.868780488 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.4753435501 43.030603864 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.75 112.824112599 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.625 22.9334400587 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.23603664747 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 1.69756097561 1060% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.382850605276 0.215688989381 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.17311318401 0.103423049105 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.164739018257 0.0843802449381 195% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.278156436001 0.15604864568 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.181999188073 0.0819641961636 222% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.2329268293 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 61.2550243902 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 11.4140731707 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.06136585366 105% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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