writing task 1: the birth rates of China and America

The given line graph compares and contrasts the data on the changes in the Chinese and American birth percentages over the 80-year period from 1920 to 2000. In overall, the rate of birth in both nations saw the significant decline but fluctuate wildly.
The most striking feature from the graph is that the figure for America was higher than that for China in most years. To specify, the birth proportion in America started at about 12% in 1920, then it has a slight fluctuation but the trend was upward to reach 13% in 1940. However, the figure plunged to just under 5% in 1945 before a remarkable increase to hit a peak of 15% in 1950. Then the American rate of birth saw a 50 - following year reduction to 7% at the end of the period.
On the other hand, the birth rate in China experienced lower values than the former. In detail, 10% was the start point of the Chinese birth proportion, and it went up and down in 20 following years between 7% before a marked reduction to reach the nadir of 5% in 5 years from 1940 to 1945. Next, the figure for China soared to peak at 20% in 1950 and declined steeply to approximately 2% in 2000.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, then, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 33.7804878049 139% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 926.0 965.302439024 96% => OK
No of words: 212.0 196.424390244 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.3679245283 4.92477711251 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81578560438 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37652378117 2.65546596893 89% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 106.607317073 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542452830189 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 267.3 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.5496449122 43.030603864 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.888888889 112.824112599 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5555555556 22.9334400587 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.23603664747 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230761057708 0.215688989381 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10035399972 0.103423049105 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0684154078124 0.0843802449381 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159645117468 0.15604864568 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0222937539083 0.0819641961636 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.2329268293 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.51 61.2550243902 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.36 11.4140731707 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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