You are advised to spend a maximum of 20 minutes on this task The line chart below shows the number of men and women that smoke cigarettes in Australia You should write at least 150 words

Essay topics:

You are advised to spend a maximum of 20 minutes on this task.

The line chart below shows the number of men and women that smoke cigarettes in Australia.

You should write at least 150 words.

The line chart provides information about the total number of smokers in Australia between the 2 genders in a forty-year period. In general, this is a downward trend. The males had a tendency to decrease, whilst the females fluctuated over years.

In the start, with a quite high number, the total quantity of male cigarette smokers in Australia reached a trough of about 2,8 million people in 1995. Then it rose slightly and stopped with the number of 3 million in the last year - 2000.

In 1960, there was a total of 1 million women who smoked and then, moderately, it reached a peak of about over 3,3 million in 1975. After 5 years, this quantity remained unchanged in a five-year duration. In the rest of this forty-year period, it declined slowly and stopped at the total number of about 2 million.

Overall, it’s obvious that more men smoked in the past but subsequently, there was a remarkable drop, whereas female smokers seem to use more cigarettes then.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... of 3 million in the last year - 2000. In 1960, there was a total of 1 million ...
^^^
Line 7, column 138, Rule ID: COMPARISONS_NNS_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'more cigarettes than'?
Suggestion: more cigarettes than
...rop, whereas female smokers seem to use more cigarettes then.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 154, Rule ID: LESS_MORE_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...ale smokers seem to use more cigarettes then.
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, then, whereas, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 806.0 965.302439024 83% => OK
No of words: 168.0 196.424390244 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79761904762 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60020574368 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60587577694 2.65546596893 98% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 106.607317073 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.595238095238 0.547539520022 109% => OK
syllable_count: 234.9 283.868780488 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.1022017445 43.030603864 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.5555555556 112.824112599 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 22.9334400587 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.23603664747 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135741157521 0.215688989381 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0576916063234 0.103423049105 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0326532234217 0.0843802449381 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0838985300986 0.15604864568 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0133696757914 0.0819641961636 16% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.2329268293 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 61.2550243902 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 11.4140731707 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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