The line chart below shows the number of men and women that smoke cigarettes in Australia You should write at least 150 words

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The line chart below shows the number of men and women that smoke cigarettes in Australia.
You should write at least 150 words.

The line graph illustrates the number of both gender who smoked cigarettes in Australia from 1960 to 2000. Overall, there were noticeable trend in both men and women as men group had a decreasing trend from beginning until end of graph, also women generation who smoked, generally increased with some fluctuations.

To begin with, men population who smoked cut down from 6 million to 3 million. Clearly, it was at the highest position in 1960 when the women population was just 1 million. The drop kept constant until 1980 as it got 4 million, then it remained steady till 1985. It worth pointing that women in this period had similar trend as they were constant as 3 million individuals. Afterward, what is remarkable is the decreasing trend from 1985 to 1995 that men population turned about 2.8 million then it became 3 million in 2000.

Moreover, the women population had it own fluctuations as it sharply increased from 1 million to 3.5 million until 1975. Additionally, it decreased about 0.5 million in 1980 and turned 3 million. As it was mentioned population of women who smoked stayed steady until 1985. Frankly what happened next was a decrease from 1985 to 2000 and this group's population tuned 2 million. Accordingly, the distance between this two groups had significantly cut down. However, men still had higher position in 2000 as they were about 1 million more.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...5 million in 1980 and turned 3 million. As it was mentioned population of women wh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, frankly, however, if, moreover, so, still, then, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 16.0 5.60731707317 285% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 3.97073170732 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1154.0 965.302439024 120% => OK
No of words: 234.0 196.424390244 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93162393162 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91114542567 3.73543355544 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73521634064 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 106.607317073 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508547008547 0.547539520022 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 320.4 283.868780488 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.2225207008 43.030603864 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.7692307692 112.824112599 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 22.9334400587 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.23076923077 5.23603664747 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111921354773 0.215688989381 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0507372378129 0.103423049105 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0548218827981 0.0843802449381 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0986009718481 0.15604864568 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0580499784846 0.0819641961636 71% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.2329268293 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 61.2550243902 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 11.4140731707 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.06136585366 93% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 40.7170731707 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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