25/10/2017You have been to a business meeting at another company and saw a piece of equipment which can be useful for your company too. Write a letter to your manager about the following:Describe the piece of equipment you have seenWhy having the same equ

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25/10/2017
You have been to a business meeting at another company and saw a piece of equipment which can be useful for your company too. Write a letter to your manager about the following:
Describe the piece of equipment you have seen
Why having the same equipment would be useful for your company
Offer your assistance in buying the equipment

Dear Mr. Smith,

I am writing to inform you the recent meeting was a success. While visiting our partners, I noticed an interesting device that may be useful for our company.

It is a usb-transmitter that turns a regular laser printer into a wi-fi one. The item is relatively small and has a size of a matchbox; moreover, it is energy efficient and consumes less electricity than a cell-phone. The transmitter requires no maintenance and begins work automatically after the equipment is plugged into a usb port of a printer.

From a conversation with my counterpart in the host company, I learned they have been exploiting this miraculous technology for a couple of years by now. That allowed them to reduce the number of printers used from one hundred and twenty to sixty because each one may be easily used by several employees. Consequently, the firm has approximately saved up to fifty thousand dollars on maintenance.

This item is being produced by a small local firm and it is literally impossible to buy the device outside the country. Admittedly, the price on them is reasonable and one piece costs about 25 dollars. If you see the idea of buying several such items as worthy, I can quickly purchase the needed number. I also may take the contacts of the company that sells those devices to phone them later if we decide to purchase more of the transmitters.

I am waiting for your prompt response,

Sincerely yours,

Eugene Dubinchuk.

Votes
Average: 8 (3 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 7, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ay be useful for our company. It is a usb-transmitter that turns a regular la...
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Line 5, column 325, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...lly after the equipment is plugged into a usb port of a printer. From a conve...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, if, may, moreover, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.48453608247 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1220.0 937.175257732 130% => OK
No of words: 248.0 206.0 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91935483871 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96837696647 3.78020617076 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93746609784 2.54303337028 116% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 127.690721649 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.657258064516 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 388.8 290.88556701 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 4.0 0.824742268041 485% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.0477192694 44.8134815571 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.8461538462 76.5299724578 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0769230769 16.8248392259 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.69230769231 4.34317383033 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158559683386 0.216113520407 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0445152941484 0.0766984524023 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0323790729533 0.0603063233224 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0787054801217 0.12726935374 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0288342592171 0.0580467560999 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 8.37731958763 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 70.7449484536 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 7.45979381443 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 8.71597938144 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 7.59969072165 117% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 41.2886597938 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.4606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.25 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

I am writing to inform you the recent meeting was a success.
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I am writing to inform you the recent meeting which was a success.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.5 out of 9
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 248 250
No. of Characters: 1167 1200
No. of Different Words: 162 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.968 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.706 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.83 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 82 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 63 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 39 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.389 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.375 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.269 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.691 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.089 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 8 5