The diagram below gives information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how fish pies are made and stored in a factory.
The fish pie contains 4 ingredients which are peas,fish,sauce and potatoes and its also stored inside a microwavable container.
There are two product delivery lines - one for potatoes and the other one for fresh salmon.
However there is a difference between the two product delivery lines - potatoes can be held for up to one month and salmon can only be held for 12 hours or less so the fresh salmon is delivered more frequently.
When salmon is being delivered lemon juice and salt are added.Later it goes through a steam oven,after the skin and bones are removed and the meat is inspected by workers.Further more ingredients such as peas and the sauce are added and in the end potatoes which are peeled,sliced and chilled are added.
And lastly the pie gets wrapped up and frozen.The pie is held in a storage until it gets dispatched to costumers.

Votes
Average: 7.6 (3 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 51, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , fish
...ie contains 4 ingredients which are peas,fish,sauce and potatoes and its also stored ...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...es and the other one for fresh salmon. However there is a difference between the two p...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 157, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun hours is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...salmon can only be held for 12 hours or less so the fresh salmon is delivered more f...
^^^^
Line 5, column 62, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Later
...elivered lemon juice and salt are added.Later it goes through a steam oven,after the ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 96, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , after
...added.Later it goes through a steam oven,after the skin and bones are removed and the ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 171, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Further
...ed and the meat is inspected by workers.Further more ingredients such as peas and the ...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 195, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...cted by workers.Further more ingredients such as peas and the sauce are added and...
^^
Line 5, column 274, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , sliced
...and in the end potatoes which are peeled,sliced and chilled are added. And lastly the ...
^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 46, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...stly the pie gets wrapped up and frozen.The pie is held in a storage until it gets ...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, lastly, so, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 7.48453608247 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 5.05154639175 277% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 32.9175257732 9% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 26.3917525773 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 768.0 937.175257732 82% => OK
No of words: 161.0 206.0 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7701863354 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56210296601 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81218588939 2.54303337028 111% => OK
Unique words: 92.0 127.690721649 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.622605031667 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 243.0 290.88556701 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.13402061856 0% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.360824742268 277% => OK
Article: 3.0 0.824742268041 364% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 12.6804123711 47% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 16.3608247423 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.5122488956 44.8134815571 180% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.0 76.5299724578 167% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8333333333 16.8248392259 159% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 4.34317383033 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 2.54639175258 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 7.41237113402 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0480465208506 0.216113520407 22% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0349613152571 0.0766984524023 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.045504981489 0.0603063233224 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0349613152571 0.12726935374 27% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.045504981489 0.0580467560999 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 8.37731958763 173% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 70.7449484536 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 7.45979381443 165% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 8.71597938144 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 7.59969072165 105% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 41.2886597938 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 8.54432989691 145% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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