The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age.Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

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The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graph illustrates the proportion of British buying different kinds of musical albums based on their sexes and ages.

Overall, Rock is the most popular among three music categories and male purchased more album than that of females in all cases.

In average, the difference of purchased album between man and woman was about 5%. The markets of Pop and Rock music were preferred mostly by young people from 25 to 34 years old. There were slight declines of album consumption in the older generation, followed by a sudden drop at the age older than 45 years old down to 5%.

Classical music made up the smallest proportion in total among all types. However, people who older than 45 years old purchased the highest amount of classical music album at approximately 20%, contrast to the pattern of pop music and rock music. The consumption trend for classical music experienced a significant fluctuation, which reach the first and the second peak at the range of 25 to 34 years old and older than 45 years old respectively.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 448, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d older than 45 years old respectively.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, in all cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 4.92783505155 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 32.9175257732 6% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 26.3917525773 114% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 856.0 937.175257732 91% => OK
No of words: 176.0 206.0 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86363636364 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64232057368 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61620427211 2.54303337028 103% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 127.690721649 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568181818182 0.622605031667 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 254.7 290.88556701 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.13402061856 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 0.824742268041 485% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.21286207 44.8134815571 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.0 76.5299724578 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 16.8248392259 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 4.34317383033 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 7.41237113402 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155970461631 0.216113520407 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0772208855095 0.0766984524023 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.03722618105 0.0603063233224 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10570899501 0.12726935374 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0173233006311 0.0580467560999 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 8.37731958763 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 70.7449484536 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 8.71597938144 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 7.59969072165 107% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 41.2886597938 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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