A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.Write a letter to the com

Dear Sir/Madam,

My name is Sam Winchester and I have lived in Smallville for the past ten years. As an active member of the local community, I was very excited to learn that Monsters Inc. is planning to sponsor in the entertainment and sports activities of the city. I think that investing in two open-air concerts is the best option.

First of all, the global impact of the open-air concerts will be much bigger as it will attract the audience all across the country and make the city more recognizable on the map. Not only it will attract more tourists which will benefit small businesses downtown but also create a cultural impact on Smallville. And I strongly believe that essentially concerts might grow into something much bigger as weekend festivals, for example.

On the other hand, the Beavers sport's team also need financial support. However, in the long run, it will not be able to lure many followers as the local arena has a very limited spacing for the attendees. This might led to low ticket sales and essentially will not have as big of an impact as open-air concerts.

By picking the second option your company will be able to have a bigger return of investments and reach more potential loyal customers, which will essentially help to donate money for other causes as well.

Kind Regards,
Samuel Winchester.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 78, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
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Line 5, column 401, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...s might grow into something much bigger as weekend festivals, for example. On t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, second, so, well, for example, i think, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 4.92783505155 223% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 32.9175257732 39% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1115.0 937.175257732 119% => OK
No of words: 229.0 206.0 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86899563319 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89008302616 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59171685247 2.54303337028 102% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 127.690721649 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598253275109 0.622605031667 96% => OK
syllable_count: 337.5 290.88556701 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.347419921 44.8134815571 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.9166666667 76.5299724578 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0833333333 16.8248392259 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.16666666667 4.34317383033 188% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168033381978 0.216113520407 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0597437314394 0.0766984524023 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0377149433209 0.0603063233224 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109250167349 0.12726935374 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0433014980774 0.0580467560999 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 8.37731958763 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 70.7449484536 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 8.71597938144 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 7.59969072165 108% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 41.2886597938 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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